Crane

beak wedged in white noise
twigs of legs snow-plant
plumage in the air
body borne invisible
muse contemplates wholesome bird

birdtanka

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Paula Goldsmith

May 1, 2025 at 12:08 PM

I enjoyed reading about your "Crane" write. A funny looking bird. "Good Luck" if for a contest. Have a wonderful day writing away..........

Kim Rodrigues

May 1, 2025 at 2:27 PM

Thank you, Paula!

Gershon Wolf

April 30, 2025 at 8:14 PM

Always enjoy your tankas, Kim. (Hadn't seen one for a while). Thanks, gw

Kim Rodrigues

May 1, 2025 at 2:27 PM

I used to write many! I was inspired!

Anne-Lise Andresen

April 30, 2025 at 5:12 AM

- Crane an elegant bird, Kim :) - Great written :) - hugs

Kim Rodrigues

April 30, 2025 at 5:15 AM

Thank you! I appreciate you, Anne-Lise!

Maria Williams

April 30, 2025 at 4:04 AM

Dear Kim,your Tanka gave me a quiet pause—like I was watching a bird vanish mid-flight, both delicate and mysterious. The last line felt like it was speaking directly to my own sense of wonder...Hugs

Kim Rodrigues

April 30, 2025 at 5:03 AM

Thank you so much, Maria! :) Hugs

Akham Nilabirdhwaja Singh

April 30, 2025 at 12:30 AM

The bird an elusive part of the vast natural world.Its beauty very nicely captured.

Kim Rodrigues

April 30, 2025 at 5:03 AM

Thank you, my friend!

Paige Hind

April 29, 2025 at 9:20 PM

Wow, we both are writing about birds! I have to say, I wrote mine before even looking at yours!! I love the first line, "muse" too, "white noise" very deep and this took some thought, <3

Kim Rodrigues

April 30, 2025 at 5:04 AM

Thank you, Paige! Will have to check on yours :)