Cowpuncher

beneath t h e s* t *a* r *s campfire flames w a n e a guitar stut~ters the cowboy’s song trails off ... - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Contest: Paint a Picture using the Septolet form (7 lines ~ 14 words) Sponsor: Joseph May Placed 1st © 24th September 2020

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Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/15/2021 5:39:00 PM

Hey this is really cool. Loved the creativity with the asterisks and spacing (even that squiggly line looks like a guitar string reverberating). Reminds me of those old westerns, lone cowboy sitting by the flames (probably going to risk his life, the next morning, doing who knows what). I guess the only thing that I don't quite understand is the title (not familiar with the term).

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 11/20/2020 6:25:00 AM

Gorgeous vista scenery serenade, Paul. Love and best wishes for the holiday.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/21/2020 8:36:00 AM

Thank you, Freddie. Festive wishes being sent your way! Regards // paul

Michael Tor

Date: 11/7/2020 4:17:00 AM

Your words create the desired illustration my friend congratulations on your well deserved winning entry...

Paul Callus
Date: 11/7/2020 8:29:00 AM

Thank you, Michael. Best regards // paul

Angela Crabtree

Date: 11/3/2020 8:53:00 PM

You definitely painted a perfect picture with your words. Have a great week, Paul :)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/5/2020 5:51:00 AM

Thank you Angela:) Your visit is appreciated. Regards // paul

Tahira Parveen

Date: 10/13/2020 1:18:00 PM

Well deserved Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/13/2020 3:34:00 PM

Thank you, Tahira. Happy writing & regards // paul

Judy Ball

Date: 10/11/2020 12:00:00 PM

Nicely done Paul. Congrats on your win. God Bless and Happy Thanksgiving. JB Been off line awhile. Very tired. still working full time overnights at Wallmart . Turing 73 on the 14th.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/12/2020 2:11:00 AM

Thank you, Judy. I believe you merit a nice rest. At our age we should be enjoying life, even in merely simple ways. Take care. Warm regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 10/8/2020 1:03:00 PM

Wow, well done, Paul! Congratulations on your great win! Hugs, Carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 10/9/2020 10:57:00 AM

Thank you, Carolyn. I have a lot to cope with at the moment, and my writing is suffering; have to try and make time! Hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/3/2020 5:54:00 PM

a well deserved first place. Congrats!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/8/2020 8:53:00 AM

Thank you, Andrea; double visits are always extra appreciated:) Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/2/2020 9:47:00 AM

This deserves first place Paul. You are so wonderful at writing in these short forms. Congratulations! Blessings xxoo

Paul Callus
Date: 10/2/2020 2:11:00 PM

Thank you, Connie; you are too kind. I am pleased to see you venturing out and paying visits to fellow poets. Take care my friend...you are in my thoughts. ~ Warm regards // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 10/2/2020 5:05:00 AM

Congratulations on your top win Paul beautiful vivid entry - I also must have got it done in 10 minutes - I love Joseph's contests!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/2/2020 9:02:00 AM

Thank you, Jenny. Pleased to share top spot with you:) Warm regards & hugs // paul

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 10/1/2020 5:32:00 AM

Love this Paul! Congratulations! Linda

Paul Callus
Date: 10/2/2020 8:29:00 AM

Thank you Linda. Pleased to share top spot with you:) Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/1/2020 5:06:00 AM

- Congratulations on your win, Paul :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 10/2/2020 8:30:00 AM

Thank you, Anne-Lise. Have a lovely weekend :) Hugs // paul

Joseph May

Date: 10/1/2020 4:21:00 AM

Very nicely done Paul, Congrats on your win..

Paul Callus
Date: 10/2/2020 8:09:00 AM

Thank you, Joseph. It was a pleasure taking part, and I appreciate the high placement. Regards // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 9/28/2020 7:13:00 PM

Dear Paul, your poem appeals to both the eyes and the imagination. I love the mellow spirit of this as well as its creative presentation. A guitar stut~ters - simply amazing! It must be easy to fall asleep neath the stars :) Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes for you, my inspiring friend.. ~Susan

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/2/2020 2:01:00 PM

Beautiful memories, indeed! Oh, how magical that must have been :)) Thank you, dear friend, for sharing your wonderful recollection with me.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/2/2020 8:44:00 AM

Thank you for your lovely critique, Susan. When I was a child I used to sleep in the open at my grandad's farm...such beautiful memories come to mind! ~ Warm regards & hugs, my dear friend. // paul

Jack Horne

Date: 9/28/2020 7:41:00 AM

such a clever one here, Paul - love the way you did this

Paul Callus
Date: 9/28/2020 11:55:00 AM

Thank you, my friend. All the best // paul

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 9/25/2020 6:05:00 AM

I love this. It's brilliant and soothing and oh, so grand. Love it again... God bless you

Paul Callus
Date: 9/25/2020 12:30:00 PM

You are too kind, Regina! Thank you! Blessings // paul

Harry Horsman

Date: 9/25/2020 2:12:00 AM

A few years back here in Oz, we had an icon cowboy singer 'Slim Dusty' your wonderful rendering reminds me of him and his many songs. He would have love your poem, Paul, as i do..

Paul Callus
Date: 9/25/2020 12:29:00 PM

Thank you, Harry, for your contribution and for pressing the 'like' button :) Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/24/2020 6:21:00 PM

so interesting how you desribe the guitar stuttering as the song trails off. Great creativity!

Paul Callus
Date: 9/25/2020 12:11:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea. You have a keen eye:) Regards // paul

Ilene Bauer

Date: 9/24/2020 2:10:00 PM

you've painted a very vivid picture, indeed, paul! best of luck in the contest...

Paul Callus
Date: 9/24/2020 3:04:00 PM

Glad you have found it to your liking, Ilene...thank you! Regards // paul

Heidi Sands

Date: 9/24/2020 12:37:00 PM

This is very nice, like going to the sleep under the stars with the guitar playing :)

Paul Callus
Date: 9/24/2020 3:02:00 PM

Thank you for reading and liking, Heidi:) Best regards // paul

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 9/24/2020 10:59:00 AM

Hello Paul, this does sound a setting for a cowboy to in. Regards Darlene.

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 9/25/2020 11:14:00 AM

Hello Paul, Yes thank you. I am doing well. I hope that you are to. Regards Darlene

Paul Callus
Date: 9/24/2020 2:56:00 PM

Thank you Darlene. Hope you are keeping well, my friend. Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/24/2020 10:39:00 AM

- Sounds like a lovely evening ... with both music and warmth ... can see it clearly, Paul :) - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 9/24/2020 2:50:00 PM

Thank you, Anne-Lise ~ a lovely evening as long as the weather is nice:) Hugs // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 9/24/2020 9:06:00 AM

I can just picture the very vivid scene Paul:-) hugs jan x

Paul Callus
Date: 9/24/2020 2:19:00 PM

Thank you, Jan. Had to rush this through! Hugs // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 9/24/2020 8:47:00 AM

I loved this contest Paul, but I think I was the last entry, I rushed to get it in this afternoon - good luck with this one my friend absolutely awesome. warm regards and hugs, Jenny.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/24/2020 9:02:00 AM

Hi Jenny....you and I must have snatched the last 2 spots! Must have been one of the quickest poems I ever wrote:) Thank you for reading and liking. ~ Warm regards & hugs, my friend // paul

Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/24/2020 7:55:00 AM

Wonder imagery beneath the stars..cowboy singing...All the best, Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/24/2020 8:38:00 AM

Thank you, Vijay. Hope you are keeping well, my friend. Regards // paul