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Cowpuncher

beneath 
t h e    s* t *a* r *s      
campfire flames
         w a n e 

a guitar stut~ters
     the cowboy’s song
          trails  off ...


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Contest: Paint a Picture
using the Septolet form
(7 lines ~ 14 words)
Sponsor: Joseph May
       Placed 1st
© 24th September 2020

Copyright © Paul Callus | Year Posted 2020

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April 15, 2021 at 5:39 PM

Hey this is really cool. Loved the creativity with the asterisks and spacing (even that squiggly line looks like a guitar string reverberating). Reminds me of those old westerns, lone cowboy sitting by the flames (probably going to risk his life, the next morning, doing who knows what). I guess the only thing that I don't quite understand is the title (not familiar with the term).

Freddie Robinson Jr.

November 20, 2020 at 6:25 AM

Gorgeous vista scenery serenade, Paul. Love and best wishes for the holiday.

November 21, 2020 at 8:36 AM

Thank you, Freddie. Festive wishes being sent your way! Regards // paul

November 7, 2020 at 4:17 AM

Your words create the desired illustration my friend congratulations on your well deserved winning entry...

November 7, 2020 at 8:29 AM

Thank you, Michael. Best regards // paul

Angela Crabtree

November 3, 2020 at 8:53 PM

You definitely painted a perfect picture with your words. Have a great week, Paul :)

November 5, 2020 at 5:51 AM

Thank you Angela:) Your visit is appreciated. Regards // paul

October 13, 2020 at 1:18 PM

Well deserved Paul.

October 13, 2020 at 3:34 PM

Thank you, Tahira. Happy writing & regards // paul

October 11, 2020 at 12:00 PM

Nicely done Paul. Congrats on your win. God Bless and Happy Thanksgiving. JB Been off line awhile. Very tired. still working full time overnights at Wallmart . Turing 73 on the 14th.

October 12, 2020 at 2:11 AM

Thank you, Judy. I believe you merit a nice rest. At our age we should be enjoying life, even in merely simple ways. Take care. Warm regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

October 8, 2020 at 1:03 PM

Wow, well done, Paul! Congratulations on your great win! Hugs, Carolyn

October 9, 2020 at 10:57 AM

Thank you, Carolyn. I have a lot to cope with at the moment, and my writing is suffering; have to try and make time! Hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich

October 3, 2020 at 5:54 PM

a well deserved first place. Congrats!

October 8, 2020 at 8:53 AM

Thank you, Andrea; double visits are always extra appreciated:) Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

October 2, 2020 at 9:47 AM

This deserves first place Paul. You are so wonderful at writing in these short forms. Congratulations! Blessings xxoo

October 2, 2020 at 2:11 PM

Thank you, Connie; you are too kind. I am pleased to see you venturing out and paying visits to fellow poets. Take care my friend...you are in my thoughts. ~ Warm regards // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

October 2, 2020 at 5:05 AM

Congratulations on your top win Paul beautiful vivid entry - I also must have got it done in 10 minutes - I love Joseph's contests!

October 2, 2020 at 9:02 AM

Thank you, Jenny. Pleased to share top spot with you:) Warm regards & hugs // paul

Linda Alice Fowler

October 1, 2020 at 5:32 AM

Love this Paul! Congratulations! Linda

October 2, 2020 at 8:29 AM

Thank you Linda. Pleased to share top spot with you:) Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

October 1, 2020 at 5:06 AM

- Congratulations on your win, Paul :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

October 2, 2020 at 8:30 AM

Thank you, Anne-Lise. Have a lovely weekend :) Hugs // paul

October 1, 2020 at 4:21 AM

Very nicely done Paul, Congrats on your win..

October 2, 2020 at 8:09 AM

Thank you, Joseph. It was a pleasure taking part, and I appreciate the high placement. Regards // paul

September 28, 2020 at 7:13 PM

Dear Paul, your poem appeals to both the eyes and the imagination. I love the mellow spirit of this as well as its creative presentation. A guitar stut~ters - simply amazing! It must be easy to fall asleep neath the stars :) Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes for you, my inspiring friend.. ~Susan

October 2, 2020 at 2:01 PM

Beautiful memories, indeed! Oh, how magical that must have been :)) Thank you, dear friend, for sharing your wonderful recollection with me.

October 2, 2020 at 8:44 AM

Thank you for your lovely critique, Susan. When I was a child I used to sleep in the open at my grandad's farm...such beautiful memories come to mind! ~ Warm regards & hugs, my dear friend. // paul

September 28, 2020 at 7:41 AM

such a clever one here, Paul - love the way you did this

September 28, 2020 at 11:55 AM

Thank you, my friend. All the best // paul

Regina Mcintosh

September 25, 2020 at 6:05 AM

I love this. It's brilliant and soothing and oh, so grand. Love it again... God bless you

September 25, 2020 at 12:30 PM

You are too kind, Regina! Thank you! Blessings // paul

September 25, 2020 at 2:12 AM

A few years back here in Oz, we had an icon cowboy singer 'Slim Dusty' your wonderful rendering reminds me of him and his many songs. He would have love your poem, Paul, as i do..

September 25, 2020 at 12:29 PM

Thank you, Harry, for your contribution and for pressing the 'like' button :) Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

September 24, 2020 at 6:21 PM

so interesting how you desribe the guitar stuttering as the song trails off. Great creativity!

September 25, 2020 at 12:11 PM

Thank you, Andrea. You have a keen eye:) Regards // paul

September 24, 2020 at 2:10 PM

you've painted a very vivid picture, indeed, paul! best of luck in the contest...

September 24, 2020 at 3:04 PM

Glad you have found it to your liking, Ilene...thank you! Regards // paul

September 24, 2020 at 12:37 PM

This is very nice, like going to the sleep under the stars with the guitar playing :)

September 24, 2020 at 3:02 PM

Thank you for reading and liking, Heidi:) Best regards // paul

Darlene De Beaulieu

September 24, 2020 at 10:59 AM

Hello Paul, this does sound a setting for a cowboy to in. Regards Darlene.

Darlene De Beaulieu

September 25, 2020 at 11:14 AM

Hello Paul, Yes thank you. I am doing well. I hope that you are to. Regards Darlene

September 24, 2020 at 2:56 PM

Thank you Darlene. Hope you are keeping well, my friend. Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

September 24, 2020 at 10:39 AM

- Sounds like a lovely evening ... with both music and warmth ... can see it clearly, Paul :) - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

September 24, 2020 at 2:50 PM

Thank you, Anne-Lise ~ a lovely evening as long as the weather is nice:) Hugs // paul

September 24, 2020 at 9:06 AM

I can just picture the very vivid scene Paul:-) hugs jan x

September 24, 2020 at 2:19 PM

Thank you, Jan. Had to rush this through! Hugs // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

September 24, 2020 at 8:47 AM

I loved this contest Paul, but I think I was the last entry, I rushed to get it in this afternoon - good luck with this one my friend absolutely awesome. warm regards and hugs, Jenny.

September 24, 2020 at 9:02 AM

Hi Jenny....you and I must have snatched the last 2 spots! Must have been one of the quickest poems I ever wrote:) Thank you for reading and liking. ~ Warm regards & hugs, my friend // paul

September 24, 2020 at 7:55 AM

Wonder imagery beneath the stars..cowboy singing...All the best, Paul.

September 24, 2020 at 8:38 AM

Thank you, Vijay. Hope you are keeping well, my friend. Regards // paul

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