Counting Days

"Imagine a lovely garden, tea for two, and this story . . . "


On the first day, she was very dulcet
She was always with him watching the sunset
Fond of laying her body on his lap
Dreaming they’ll kiss while she takes a nap

On the second day, she was still smiling
Moving across their bed…reaching and waving
her soft hand to touch him but she became weak
She tried to kiss him as she watched him sleep 

On the third day, her beauty faded
She was always on her couch; ill-hearted
Her man patiently waits for her everyday
but was never appreciated in any way

On the fifth day, he slowly walked away
As she watched him go, she wished that he would stay
but she could not speak now
For she was like a doll who couldn't take a bow

It was on the last, she broke her life
A little girl screamed when she saw a knife
and a red sleeping rose wearing her silky dress
Still facing the window and reaching for his caress
Copyright © | Year Posted 2008

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Richards Avatar
December 14, 2008 at 10:24 AM
This does haunt one's thoughts. Very well done, however, and deserved to be featured this week. congratulations! Carrie
Winter Avatar
December 9, 2008 at 5:46 PM
Congrats on your featured write! Happy holidays! Love, Shar
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December 8, 2008 at 8:28 PM
Congratulations Nadine on the featuring of your poem "Counting Days." Vince
George   Avatar
December 8, 2008 at 4:28 PM
vividly haunting, dear Nadine. Thank you for sharing. lainie
Jordan Avatar
December 7, 2008 at 7:30 PM
Nadine I agree with Mickey - You not only took me there it was also a very intense ride - Great job on this heartbreaking poem - Congratulations on being featured this week - God Bless, MJ
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December 7, 2008 at 4:28 PM
Nadine - Congratulations on your featured poem this week! Wishing you and yours a Happy Holiday season. Peace always, John
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December 7, 2008 at 2:59 PM
Nadine, I truly admire the intensity you have injected throughout your amazing piece here. I want to now say Congratulations for being featured. Wonderful Poem... MPK
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December 7, 2008 at 1:56 PM
What a sad for a life to end. Congratulations on having your poem featured. Wishing you continued success with your writing. Karen
Jordan Avatar
August 13, 2008 at 4:21 AM
Nadine - Very interesting poem - beautiful yet sad - God bless
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