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Counting Days

"Imagine a lovely garden, tea for two, and this story . . . " On the first day, she was very dulcet She was always with him watching the sunset Fond of laying her body on his lap Dreaming they’ll kiss while she takes a nap On the second day, she was still smiling Moving across their bed…reaching and waving her soft hand to touch him but she became weak She tried to kiss him as she watched him sleep On the third day, her beauty faded She was always on her couch; ill-hearted Her man patiently waits for her everyday but was never appreciated in any way On the fifth day, he slowly walked away As she watched him go, she wished that he would stay but she could not speak now For she was like a doll who couldn't take a bow It was on the last, she broke her life A little girl screamed when she saw a knife and a red sleeping rose wearing her silky dress Still facing the window and reaching for his caress

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 12/14/2008 10:24:00 AM
This does haunt one's thoughts. Very well done, however, and deserved to be featured this week. congratulations! Carrie
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Date: 12/9/2008 5:46:00 PM
Congrats on your featured write! Happy holidays! Love, Shar
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Date: 12/8/2008 8:28:00 PM
Congratulations Nadine on the featuring of your poem "Counting Days." Vince
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Date: 12/8/2008 4:28:00 PM
vividly haunting, dear Nadine. Thank you for sharing. lainie
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Date: 12/7/2008 7:30:00 PM
Nadine I agree with Mickey - You not only took me there it was also a very intense ride - Great job on this heartbreaking poem - Congratulations on being featured this week - God Bless, MJ
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Date: 12/7/2008 4:28:00 PM
Nadine - Congratulations on your featured poem this week! Wishing you and yours a Happy Holiday season. Peace always, John
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Date: 12/7/2008 2:59:00 PM
Nadine, I truly admire the intensity you have injected throughout your amazing piece here. I want to now say Congratulations for being featured. Wonderful Poem... MPK
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Date: 12/7/2008 1:56:00 PM
What a sad for a life to end. Congratulations on having your poem featured. Wishing you continued success with your writing. Karen
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Date: 8/13/2008 4:21:00 AM
Nadine - Very interesting poem - beautiful yet sad - God bless
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