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Could You Be

Could you be the one in my dreams, the figure I see, that is meant for me? Could you be, the love of my life, my future wife? Could you be? Could you be the the one that I want, to fit my picky ways? Show you off, our love I'd flaunt you have my mind in such a daze! I want you, could you be the one, I need your radiance!! Shine on me like the sun. Make me whole, my heart you stole, so quickly now, you know. I want you boo, all of you, mind, body and soul. I need you boo, I yearn for you adhesive like super glue. Jared Pickett 5/18/2010 Asavvy1

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Laura Cole

Date: 3/6/2014 9:26:00 PM

Longing for the one I see. Just like me. I've read many of your poems and this one especially touches me deeply. So moving and heartfelt. You have a gift :-)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/19/2010 9:06:00 PM

Jared, this is a sweet love poem. It seems like it may have been meant for that one contest a long time ago? I sure enjoyed this one. And wow, how cool that a modern young guy like you knows about Sara Teasdale and has read her poetry extensively. YOu even mentioned one I don't know about! Luv, Andrea

Becca H

Date: 7/21/2010 11:06:00 AM

Very nice write. :) Hope you find your boo. ~ Becky

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 6/3/2010 11:06:00 AM

I like this poem a lot, Jared. It isn't easy to be single and looking for that right forever person. I particularly like the line, "Show you off, our love I'd flaunt you have my mind in such a daze!" because it helps me understand a little better about how men love and think. And it reminds me of something very sweet that I overheard my son-in-law say about my daughter...whom he likes to flaunt. She loves it. (I never did...I have learned.) I've enjoyed reading your work, today. Dane

Gerard Keogh Jr.

Date: 6/2/2010 4:04:00 PM

Boo is in for a good time. Some of this reads like a song lyric and it has a soft romantic feel of young love. That's not that easy to capture and you have largely done that. Thank you so much for your faith in my work and regards, Gerard.

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 6/1/2010 11:49:00 AM

The super glue would be a great couples test of compatability...Maybe?? Could be painful?? Stuck on your works!!:)

Date: 5/21/2010 8:31:00 AM

Creative way to convey your thoughts. I'm sure that most have asked some of these questions at some point in their lives. Thank you for choosing my poem as one of your contest winners. Have a nice day! Karen

Joe Flach

Date: 5/20/2010 6:40:00 PM

The question asked a million times. Funny, it seems the glue is often found only after the quest is given up and then, lo and behold, she's there. Nice poem, Jared. Joe

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/19/2010 2:46:00 PM

Great love write...Keep the creative pen flowing..Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/19/2010 9:48:00 AM

Sweet and soft Mr. J. and me thinks LUV is in the air for the Lone Wolf... your questions are very heartfelt and hope they all get answered... just saying "hi" while on vacation in S.C. this week on sunny 82 degree beach..then off to Lauderdale.. then Long Island ..then the Jersey Shore... with luv from the "Sweetheart"

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 5/18/2010 8:49:00 PM

Gotta love that line "adhesive like super glue"--never thought of it that way, but it actually works--really enjoyed this write of yours, Jared :) thank you so much again for the win :) now I better start working on that acrostic! (heehee I'm going to put my dilly dallying to good use & write an entry for your contest!)

Anish Shrivastava

Date: 5/18/2010 1:59:00 PM

i wish she will shine on you like a sun:) this is really nice

Date: 5/18/2010 1:02:00 PM

I believe this is the most beautiful poem that I've ever read and it goes to my Favorites. It brought many tears of joy to my eyes Scarlett

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 5/18/2010 11:58:00 AM

That super glue made me smile,your poems are fun,and Hey hope I'll be invited to that wedding and my ps friends too. .I can hear the ding dong of bells,lovely sweet poem. .Charma

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 5/18/2010 10:50:00 AM

It was a pleasure to read your outstanding poetry this morning Jared. I hope you have a wonderful day filled with inspiration. Love,Carol

Amy Green

Date: 5/18/2010 9:10:00 AM

"adhesive like super glue." Love it! Great poem!