Debbie Duncan Poet Dramatic Verse

Cotton Candy On a Windy Day

You explain your thoughts away.
Like cotton candy on a windy day
As your adventures never seem to end.
Talk of riding roller coasters straight to 
heaven and back again.

You say you're an angel incarnate disguise.
Though you never say how you know this.
You're always wanting to sit by the sea.
You say, it's to wait for your lover, And 
You're most definitely sure it's not me.


You take me on rides I've never been before.
I know I could get off your merry-go-round.
Not really sure how to do that, though.
As you show me the many possibilities of me.

Though I watch you slit your wrist.
As you let the blood run free.
And I do nothing to stop you.
Only because you want to be set free. 

 
Fri. 11 pm 7/ 19/ 2013

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Joseph May January 29, 2014 at 7:28 PM I guess he did ride to heaven...very sad ending...

Karl Marszalowicz August 15, 2013 at 7:20 PM first she gets high on the roller coaster then goes south as a lover. cotton your candy truly is the tumble weed of the fair. you don't know where its been and don't know where it's going. Debbie Duncan August 15, 2013 at 9:04 PM Thank you for reading Karl ;}

Sukmawati Komala August 13, 2013 at 10:33 PM hi deary sweety Debbie.. so very nice to ready your beautiful poem... :) Debbie Duncan August 15, 2013 at 9:04 PM Hi Sukmawa ;}

Laura Breidenthal August 6, 2013 at 10:15 PM Wow-- amazing work here. I cannot even began to comprehend it fully. But your words hit familiar spots in my heart. Beautiful work. Always, Laura Debbie Duncan August 7, 2013 at 12:20 AM Thank you so much Laura ;}

Don Johnson August 6, 2013 at 5:04 PM Yep i worked as a wardsman at a hospital..saw an Aboriginal lady on the footpath, blood dripping from her slashed wrists, as i went home after 11pm finish of my shift... So i took her to another hospital and the nurses accused me of not looking after my girlfriend properly??? qualudes again ... Debbie Duncan August 6, 2013 at 5:44 PM does that mean you liked my write ;}

Suzanne Delaney August 3, 2013 at 11:50 AM Very surprising....I thought it was to be about clouds. Excellent and suspenseful finish. SuZ Debbie Duncan August 3, 2013 at 3:20 PM Thank you SuZ ;}

Sara Kendrick July 29, 2013 at 7:50 AM Didn't call 911 or apply pressure?..Great expressive and emotive work..Thanks for the visit to my work..Yes, the more I know about what is in food the less I want to eat boxed and ready made..Jello is made from something that comes out of animal bones maybe when it is cooked..I know when I boil a chicken there is part that will congeal and well as when I bake a ham,etc..That is what is used but I am sure it comes from the cheapest source that the manufacturer can get..I just had cereal well.Sara Debbie Duncan July 30, 2013 at 8:03 PM Thank you for coming by Sara ;}

Duke Beaufort July 28, 2013 at 6:19 PM Not sure what to make of this. Sometimes, the signs are not so obvious. The dark side of things is always interesting. Debbie Duncan July 29, 2013 at 3:46 PM Thanks for reading Duke ;}

Cherie Thomas July 26, 2013 at 7:38 PM Hi Debbie....What a shocker didnt expect the ending,,, love how you convey your thoughts great poem,,,, really enjoyed reading thankyou!!! Cherie.... Debbie Duncan July 26, 2013 at 10:02 PM Thank you Cherie ;}

Donna Jones July 26, 2013 at 1:40 PM Took me right along to familiar places....loved it Debbie.... Debbie Duncan July 26, 2013 at 3:30 PM Thank you Donna ;}

April Gabriella July 24, 2013 at 9:06 PM Oh my, what a dark turn this took. Beautifully written piece though. Very nice. Debbie Duncan July 24, 2013 at 11:05 PM Thank you April ;}

Poet Destroyer A July 23, 2013 at 11:20 PM Hi Deb, wow..i thought it was gonna be about cotton candy.. and a breeze... this is a twist... what inspired such a poem... wow... love it...LINDA Debbie Duncan July 23, 2013 at 11:25 PM Thank you Linda ;}

Andrea Dietrich July 23, 2013 at 7:42 AM gosh, that was an unexpected ending for me. How sad because a person like this sounds so marvelous the way you have characterized him.. Debbie Duncan July 23, 2013 at 11:21 PM I thought some would reply about that ending ;}

Poet Tacito July 23, 2013 at 7:42 AM An ominous & intense roller coaster. I did not expect that kind of ending. Damn, excellent job! Debbie Duncan July 23, 2013 at 11:24 PM Thank you Drake ;}

Andrea Dietrich July 23, 2013 at 7:41 AM debbie , I love your alternate ending on the Roses are red poem. now to see your poem here. Debbie Duncan July 23, 2013 at 11:19 PM I thought you might ;}