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For the Skating Upon Saturns Rings Poetry Contest,
Sponsored by Sara Jama

Skating upon Saturn's rings, on the outskirts of gold, executing my double axel, in the brisk, season of cold. The sole sound is of ice skates, spraying bits behind; In rich, purple dusk, of the chaotic universe entwined. A wide-eyed dreamer, in the red heartbeat of fantasy, does slow twirls and excited spins, jumping uncannily! Skating on concentric rings-the adventure of her life, Stars shining all together, a hundred moons in the sky.

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Ann Peck

Date: 3/6/2025 9:01:00 AM

Your's is a beautiful fantasy, Evelyn! "...A wide-eyed dreamer, in the red heartbeat of fantasy..." Congratulations!

Evelyn Judy Buehler
Date: 3/6/2025 1:05:00 PM

Dear Ann, your lovely words of congratulations are received with much delight. Thank you. :)

Ink Empress

Date: 2/25/2025 8:12:00 AM

Dear evelyn, how did i miss reading this gem! It’s absolutely gorgeous and flows so well and its so fitting for the prompt too! I love so many lines in this as well as the rhymes and cadence and your wordplay, so exquisite and pretty as always! I especially love the lines “ Skating on concentric rings-the adventure of her life, Stars shining all together, a hundred moons in the sky.” such an eloquent ending! A fave this is for me! Congratulations on your win! Sending you light always

Evelyn Judy Buehler
Date: 2/25/2025 8:25:00 PM

Thank you for your kind words, my dear Ink. Your remarks and your fave fill me with delight! It's such a pleasure to read your comment. Blessings and hugs. :)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/24/2025 11:30:00 AM

- A lovely fantasy, Evelyn :) - Congratulations on your win in the contest :) - hugs

Evelyn Judy Buehler
Date: 2/24/2025 2:03:00 PM

Your gratifying remarks are very much appreciated, Anne-Lise. :) hugs

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 2/21/2025 9:39:00 AM

Wonderful write though of course one must suspend truth. No one can come to Saturn and live. Still great imagery.

Evelyn Judy Buehler
Date: 2/21/2025 1:53:00 PM

Thank you very much for your thoughts. Whether a dream or fantasy, I enjoyed writing this poem, which was a fun excursion to our lovely night skies. :)