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Poetic Form: Sedoka

Inspired: 2024 July 20

Image: One Lit Candle

Ichikatauta: "First Value of Close" the day that will live in infamy ~ the fifteenth of April ~ tax day Nikatauta: "Second Value of Close" the house that Jack built with the deck of playing cards I'll huff and I'll puff Sedokada: "Sixth Evaluation of Close just smoke and mirrors magic the rabbit is out trick is how to put it back an apple a day keeps tax man and Eve away sharing tax refund today

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Jan Allison

Date: 7/20/2024 12:46:00 PM

I have seldom written this form Hilo, i especially love the second and third poems! hugs jan xx

Hilo Poet
Date: 7/20/2024 1:00:00 PM

OM, I just did it, anyway, I know the Japanese part of it, I just gave it definition, four-stanzas are typically one tho I part it, 1st two more haiku less senryu, but here I wrote ALL human nature (5-7-5, 5-7-5) last two completes sedoka (5-7-7, 5-7-7) you can switch the second only (7-5-5, 7-5-5) voila, Aloha Jan, William