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Contemporary Haiku

"Contemporary Haiku" by Catie Lindsey: children play and scream in a world at war ~ school bell rings in a war-torn town where a child screams for his mom. . . a school bell rings (I've removed this revision for Catie from the contest and am using the tanka above it on my poetry page!)

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Debbie Duncan
Date: 12/27/2012 9:42:00 PM
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Love these short poems,, you know Haiku, Tanka, ,,,,,, Thank you for reading my Tudor Court, I love history from little girl. Jonathon Rhys Meyers was the good looking guy/ King Henry on " The Tudors. He also played Elvis,,, look it up on utube ;}
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Erich Goller
Date: 10/30/2012 12:34:00 PM
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all wars are hell, a heartfelt expressed Haiku, Thanks for sharing it,God bless yoy, Hugs!Erich
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Phyllis Babcock
Date: 10/19/2012 9:56:00 AM
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See you took one of Catie's poems for the contest and did the revision. Great write. love phyl
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Harry Horsman
Date: 10/19/2012 1:56:00 AM
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Oh yes this is good, Andrea, a cutting poem like this, needs to be read....
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Poet Destroyer A
Date: 10/18/2012 3:13:00 PM
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Hi, Andrea, are both the haiku's from Catie,,, I'm confused... anyways...I like the second haiku... and the tanka, better... xox~pd
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Len Gasun
Date: 10/17/2012 4:18:00 PM
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Excellent one my dear! You're doing it well my dear great poet! Good luck always and I wish you all the best! :) hugsLG
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Joann Grisetti
Date: 10/15/2012 7:57:00 PM
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I think you have done a good job at capturing the mood and tone of the original.
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Michael J. Falotico
Date: 10/15/2012 6:27:00 PM
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Well I like it a lot. Well done my dear Andrea. :•) hugs Michael
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Black Eyed Susan
Date: 10/15/2012 8:02:00 AM
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nicely done. good luck :)
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Jack Ellison
Date: 10/15/2012 6:47:00 AM
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A great variation on Catie's... kudos! Hugs, Jack
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Nette Onclaud
Date: 10/15/2012 2:10:00 AM
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superb aha moment, andie... war-torn to bell ringing... who said you can't nail a ku?.. best wishes and huggs!.:)
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Ravi Sathasivam
Date: 10/15/2012 12:35:00 AM
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Excellent haiku. Enjoyed. Tfs
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Robert Pettit
Date: 10/14/2012 11:53:00 PM
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Nice revised version of Catie's work. Catie's haiku is still quite admirable. You have only rendered a good variation of it.
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Kash Poet
Date: 10/14/2012 11:15:00 PM
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Very nice aproach by you.The deadline for catie's contest is Nov 05 and today is Oct 14:)
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Kash Poet
Date: 10/14/2012 11:16:00 PM
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approach....And best wishes.
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Joseph May
Date: 10/14/2012 8:10:00 PM
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nice haiku Andrea...best wishes...love...Joseph
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Russell Sivey
Date: 10/14/2012 5:23:00 PM
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This is a very nice rendition of Catie's Senryu Andrea! I really enjoyed this remake a lot, a stupendous write! Wonderful piece, Great Work!!
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Terry O'Leary
Date: 10/14/2012 3:48:00 PM
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War is wrong... both versions are perfect! Terry
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Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 10/14/2012 3:40:00 PM
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MOOO ..... good moooaiku - "ku" is cow .... :) :) :) Luck in contest Andrea! Have a nice Sunday evening. - oxox love Anne-Lise :)
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