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Contemplating the Depths

Tonight, the girl explores how the grains of sand retreat from the harsh steps that her feet take along deserted shores. Not so long since eager bride took a husband by her side until death? the moon said no. The water hums and roars while the winds temper the heat from the burn of his deceit and his words down empty shores - how the passion now had died, nothing more could she provide. 'did he love me?' the moon said no. Empty now, the dresser drawers lying open in defeat letting his soft smell retreat, lost forever from these shores. She wondered: 'if I cried would the waves or would the tide even notice?' the moon said no.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 11/15/2008 3:18:00 PM
AWESOME!! Loved it!! Forget the moon, go with the waves! Wood
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Date: 10/15/2008 5:45:00 AM
lovely use of enjambment, repetition and rhyme all add up to a very satisfying read.The forlorn image of the dresser drawers lying open "in defeat"is very vivid. the whole poem conveys an overwhelmung sense of loss. BRILLIANT r
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Date: 10/13/2008 7:39:00 AM
There is always, in feeling of insignificance, a deep sense of loneliness. ANd often pouring the sadness out really helps.. this done so creatively and so beautiful leaves one awed. Did I made sense? I hope so.. I think I caught the mood in this poem.. Sigh! Brgds. George
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Date: 10/13/2008 6:14:00 AM
Wow. LOVE this. So sad, so sorry. The moon had to be the bearer of such bad news. Your writing is brilliant. Love, Shar
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