Black Eyed Susan Poet Rhyme

Constanza

I don’t need the flowers, vases
Sure they’re pretty on the table 
But they’re proof we live a fable 

Trips to warm, exotic places
Could bring the love that we let go 
Back to us; we can take it slow

All I want are your embraces
Let’s try a few, to remember
Where we were, just last September

I know you’ve been other places -
I’m asking you to give them up
A year’s gone by, a year too much

With them around, I am faceless
Please try to see me, here, instead
Rekindle this love; leave their beds




I don’t need the flowers, vases
Trips to warm, exotic places
All I want are your embraces
I know you’ve been other places -
With them around, I am faceless

8/31/12

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Carol Sunshine Brown September 26, 2012 at 5:52 AM A belated congratulations on your super win in Andrea's "Can You Constanza" contest Susan. Love, Carol

Poet Destroyer A September 24, 2012 at 10:03 AM Susan, :-). Congratulations with your awesome winning poem in Andrea's "Can you Constanza?" contest. Love it, always~ LUV*PD

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl September 24, 2012 at 2:11 AM Belated Congratulations sweetie xx

Lee Ramage September 22, 2012 at 9:40 PM A very sad touching write. Beautifully written and a well deserved win. Congratulations Lee

Joyce Johnson September 22, 2012 at 8:47 AM Winsome and woeful. Congratulations Susan. Love, Joyce

Joseph May September 22, 2012 at 5:13 AM congrats on your win Susan...splendid

Len Gasun September 22, 2012 at 1:00 AM My hearty congratulations on your win my dear friend, Susan!! hugs:) Leonora

Connie Marcum Wong September 21, 2012 at 11:54 PM Susan, Congratulations on your placement in Andrea’s “Can you Constanza? Contest.” There were so many really amazing entries we had a very difficult time deciding. We had to go by who followed the form best, and whose poem was most creative. I spent 4 and half hours going over the poems and Andrea, a lot longer. Thank you so much for your wonderful entry Mahalo, Connie

Linda-Marie Sweetheart September 21, 2012 at 11:25 PM CONGRATS SUSAN ON A STUNNING WRITE AND STELLAR WIN LUV .. STATED AND WRITTEN SO WELL .. IMPRESSIVE PIECE LUV.

Andrea Dietrich September 21, 2012 at 9:01 PM SUsan, what I liked most about your entry was the "realness" of it. How it has such a modern feel to it. I especially loved those lines like "we live a fable" and the raw feeling expressed in that third stanza. Congrats on your win in my contest. Luv, Andrea

Cynthia Alvez September 10, 2012 at 8:25 AM Lovely verse...the one for whom you have written this surely is a "love coward"... Cynthia

Joseph May September 9, 2012 at 8:29 AM nice write Susan....best wishes in the contest ...hugs...Joseph

Apoorva Patrikar September 7, 2012 at 11:10 AM strong stuff there susan. like it

Dan Kearley September 5, 2012 at 10:47 PM It reads very nice...But I hate to say it Constanzas aren't for me. Ha,ha..I just can't do them? It's plain to see you can...Very nice. :o)

Sara Kendrick September 5, 2012 at 11:54 AM That is what most women want is to be loved in words, deeds, and physical expression..Thanks for stopping by..Great expressive work..If for the contest, reads like a winner...Good luck..Sara

Nette Onclaud September 5, 2012 at 11:15 AM i drool over the sentimental flow of your words, susan.. this is s winning material for me... thanks for the wonderful journey i went through for your recent contest; much honored..:) huggs!

Len Gasun September 5, 2012 at 10:26 AM Wow!!!! This is a very wonderful write and entry, Susan. You got a perfect theme for your constanza. This is a winner for me!!!! Thanks a lot for sharing and thanks you for reading and appreciating mine;although, I think I need to improve more. Thanks for everything especially for your encouragement, inspirational comments and making me win in one of your contests. Million thanks to you!!! hugs:) leonora

Harry Horsman September 4, 2012 at 2:51 PM wonderful poem, sad though, good luck in the contest.

Jack Horne September 4, 2012 at 2:09 PM lovely constanza, Susan - a sure winner here. Thanks - loved the contest : )

Russell Sivey August 31, 2012 at 3:15 PM This is a fabulous and incredible write my friend! That third stanza is truly the greatest one of the bunch! It speaks volumes just within its small about of words that you wrote! This is a stupendous piece, Great Work!!

Anne-Lise Andresen August 31, 2012 at 2:02 PM A lovely poem B.E.S. - Flowers can say many words, after a while they will die. Faithful love - tenderness - one and share your life with - Love that never dies, it is the dream and wish. Thank you for your beautiful poem B.E.S. Wishing you a beautiful weekend. oxox love / / Anne-Lise :)

Delysia Hendricks August 31, 2012 at 12:56 PM Exquisite constanza, Susan. I like the smooth flow of your writing. Good luck to you in the contest. :)

Joann Grisetti August 31, 2012 at 12:50 PM I really like your constanza. The last verse is a great poem on its own.