consciousness

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Poetic Form: Senryu

Inspired: 2023 December 04

*1st Place*
Read Me!
Contest Judged: 2023 December 06
Sponsored by: Silent One

Image: The Faceless People by Pinterest

The Faceless People - Chris McKenney | Mirror photography, Horror photography, Surrealism ...

am I forethought or
an afterthought or what you
see in the mirror

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 12/29/2023 8:29:00 AM

Congratulations on being on the "100 Best New Poems" list for Soup. A wonderful write/ending/picture. Few words with much said... Have a great/wonderful day/2024 writing away.................

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/29/2023 8:49:00 AM

A gracious words of thanks, Paula, and to you as well, a Happiest 2024. Aloha, William.

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 12/6/2023 12:44:00 PM

I think all three, William: Very intriguing picture provoking these thoughts. Congrats on you placement in the contest. SuZ

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/13/2023 4:42:00 PM

Aloha, Suzanne, yes, consciousness is the presence of thought, processing its inceptions via perceptions, culminating in a foreseeable conclusion, instants a mirrored look "What will I do today?", then, an idea is realized. Buzz'n back Mahalo, William

Ink Empress

Date: 12/6/2023 6:36:00 AM

So much said in few syllables. Intriguing and heartfelt, i can feel so many thoughts flowing throughout you Senryu. Well delivered. And i love the picture youve used here too. Brilliant. Pleasure reading this. Congrats on being on the winners list

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/6/2023 8:17:00 AM

I see you're also called Inky by some soupers, but I like Ink Empress. Thanks, my friend. Aloha, William

Silent One

Date: 12/6/2023 5:54:00 AM

I am a bit surprised Hilo my friend, this is your most favourite poem or the one you feel most proud? I have read so many excellent poems from you.. this one is deep, and a great senryu.. I just though you may have posted something a bit longer.. thanks for taking part and congratulations on having your poem showcased my friend..

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/6/2023 8:12:00 AM

I was gonna write a whole spiel, but thanks, my friend. Aloha, William