Concerto Allergy

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Wheeze in, wheeze out again as pollen invades two chambers of lungs in a choral synapse, an orchestral acapella lifting my bronchial tubes as they rise and warble high-pitched notes: this is the melody of allergy drenched in breathless tunes right down my now tightened navel while oxygen dips to 87--a horrific musical trilling nurses in an otherwise quiet emergency room... And this big needle enters my greenish veins to release a ditty called 'solucortef' which opens this clogged overture, sending me through a gateway of trance as my Einstein-like hair droops, weaving squeaky knots... finally, I river through calmer streams: this very instance, dear bladder sings another tempo, a urinary whistle... the finale of a long, 3-hour allergy concerto without any staged intermission. Broken Wing's Take The Dagger From My Heart, Please - 2 Resent 10/9/2016 ------------------ From Body Of Work Contest Submitted 9/13/2016 Visual Attached Judged 10/6/2016 ...lungs, bronchial tubes, navel, veins, hair, bladder

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Date: 11/8/2016 3:41:00 PM
Oh. Being in a asthmatic state plus pneumonia for days now. I can so relate. Yeck... Great poem! !!
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Date: 9/14/2016 10:14:00 AM
lovely poems .Great wording .
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Date: 9/13/2016 8:31:00 PM
Wow, Nette. Hospitals should have poems like yours displayed in emergency rooms and patient walls. Now, wouldn't that be a genuine health care improvement? :-)
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Date: 9/13/2016 6:39:00 PM
Nette, this is hilarious. It;s wonderful to see your funny bone. Thanks for the belly laugh!
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Date: 9/13/2016 5:56:00 PM
I can imagine the 'concert' and raucous scene of this plight. The humor is crisp like watching Saturday Night Live. You can make light of things and get away with it perfectly!
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Date: 9/13/2016 3:46:00 PM
loved this poem
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Date: 9/13/2016 2:43:00 PM
You created a comic sketch of an allergic attack. Hilarious, witty, plus a singing sensation,lol. Bravo!
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Date: 9/13/2016 1:50:00 PM
Asthma/alleric reaction can be so frightening for both the suffer and those who witness an attack- a vivid descriptive write Nette:-) hugs Jan xx
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