Dr. Upma A. Sharma Poet Chastushka

Compromise- Chastushka

Compromise- Chastuska 


Memories of eternal togetherness,
Keep pinching my betrayed soul,
Why is he not defying to confess ?
Blinded by diamond now settled for coal ?

Is there a layer of mist before his eyes ?
My emotions till brim why can't he espy,
In front of mighty tiger as if a goat sighs,
Will friendship of a horse with grass justify ?



Written September 1st, 2014
ABAB 
For contest 'Chastuska me' by Dr. Ram Mehta

Awarded HM

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Roy Jerden September 19, 2014 at 10:44 PM Interesting analogies, Dr. Up. Well done! Congratulations!

Tim Smith September 16, 2014 at 11:04 PM Many hugs on this win....congrats

Andrea Dietrich September 16, 2014 at 3:48 PM Congrats on the winners' list. I think he asked for only one. that might be why it is not placed higher.

Carolyn Devonshire September 16, 2014 at 2:25 PM An excellent write, Dr. Sharma, and that last line has the WOW factor. Congratulations on your win!

Jan Allison September 16, 2014 at 11:32 AM many congrats Dr Sharma :-) Hugs Jan xx

Brenda Meier-Hans September 16, 2014 at 8:17 AM Congratulations Dr. Sharma. Very lovely.

Dr.Ram Mehta September 16, 2014 at 6:44 AM Dr. Upma, I needed only one stanza. Congrats on the win.

Richard Lamoureux September 2, 2014 at 10:06 PM This brought to mind the movie Life of Pi. This has a mood of wisdom about it. Good luck in Dr. Ram's contest.

Andrea Dietrich September 2, 2014 at 3:24 PM a very interesting use of symbolism with the tiger and then the horse! I wonder is it based on asian astrology?

Carolyn Devonshire September 1, 2014 at 2:16 PM Dear Dr. Upma, You are the diamond and if he can't see it, then he is the coal. I had to giggle at the last line. How clever! Best wishes in Dr. Ram's contest. Love, Carolyn