Complete Surprise

I didn't think I'd ever get to meet you, knowing full well how much rejection stings. And I thought the stories I'd heard were true, that you're a full-fledged bird flexing its wings. Not a caged canary who sweetly sings, but a hawk, keen for the thrill the hunt brings. You appeared Angelic, beyond pretty, and so, I didn't believe I had a chance. You were breathtaking, charming, and witty; I doubted that I'd get a second glance. And yet, your aura held me in a trance, compelling me to ask you for a dance. At first, I thought you'd laugh and ignore me; I wasn't entirely sure how I should start. I was tempted to turn around and flee as I approached a living work of art. And my courage was fast falling apart, scared that you might chide me and break my heart. But instead, you smiled, looked into my eyes and answered yes: to my complete surprise.
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Scars Avatar
December 26, 2018 at 12:29 PM
I just read your contest and let me tell you how VERY honored I am you chose to use my Urban Sonnet as a form. I am so blessed to see this be used you don't even know! My last name is "Urbaniak" which is why I names it "Urban". Thank you Emile and Be blessed! Merry Christmas and Happy New Year! May 2019 be full of gratitude and joy :)-luloo
Pinet Avatar
December 26, 2018 at 2:47 PM
Thank you Lu Loo, I find your Urban Sonnet form to be challenging and beautiful if used properly. I'm pleased that you are pleased with my contest my friend, Emile.
Marcum Wong Avatar
December 14, 2018 at 2:51 PM
Your lovely poem brings back memories of those awkward teen years where it took such courage to ask someone out for fear of rejection. A great example of Luloo's form for the contest Emile. Happy Holidays. ; ) xxoo
Pinet Avatar
December 15, 2018 at 8:25 AM
Thanks Connie, the comments and support of my friends like you are what keeps me coming back to this site, have a wonderful Happy Holidays my friend, Emile.
Daniel Avatar
November 27, 2018 at 7:10 AM
This is a wonderful poem, Emile, great job:)
Pinet Avatar
November 27, 2018 at 10:00 AM
Thanks Joe, I appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.
Payton Avatar
March 7, 2018 at 12:13 AM
Sums it up for me. Emile you're talented.
Pinet Avatar
March 7, 2018 at 8:36 AM
Thanks Normie, your support is most appreciated my friend, Emile.
Scars Avatar
February 21, 2018 at 9:45 AM
oh the excitement of a new love! great poem dear Emile :) thank you and congrats :)-luloo
Pinet Avatar
February 21, 2018 at 12:00 PM
Thanks Laura, it was my pleasure to participate in your contest, Emile.
Gauthier Avatar
February 20, 2018 at 9:59 AM
Quite darling. Congrats on your sweet win, Emile.
Pinet Avatar
February 20, 2018 at 10:08 AM
Thanks Line, as always your comments are most welcome my friend, Emile.
Dietrich Avatar
February 5, 2018 at 3:51 AM
Awwww, this is SO nice. The theme kind of matches with the poem I did today for Broken Wings. A triple dizain type poem on my junior high days (this picture and the theme of your poem match up with my junior high days!!) Anyway, I have not posted it yet. hopefully soon. I think Laura will just love what you did with urban sonnet.
Pinet Avatar
February 5, 2018 at 8:33 AM
Thanks Andrea, the comments and support of my friends are what keep me coming back to this site my friend, Emile.
Sands Avatar
January 22, 2018 at 11:09 AM
Very nice rhyming lines in this Emile :)
Pinet Avatar
January 22, 2018 at 11:48 AM
Thanks Heidi, it's always nice to hear from you my friend, Emile.
Michael Avatar
January 22, 2018 at 10:13 AM
Dance and sway, my friend... You've got a nice flow of ideas in your poem...All the best Emile
Pinet Avatar
January 22, 2018 at 11:48 AM
Thanks Arturo, your support is most appreciated my friend, Emile.
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