Commotion

Evening star risen,
   Commotion in the night blue,
      A murder crisis.



A. Green

*Though I am sure most people know this, a "murder" is a flock of crows.

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Keith Bickerstaffe

May 17, 2010 at 12:21 AM

What a cool piece! Although I am glad you appended the explanation. I know the phrase, but I might have been scratching my head for a whilel Blessings, Keith PS SOUPMAIL!!!!!!!!!!!

Sharon Winter

April 20, 2010 at 5:41 AM

Awesome haiku. Very familiar with the term as I actually feel they are a bad omen (maybe too many Stephen King books : )). Amy, wanted to thank you for my win in your last contest. I wrote it for a very dear friend I call my brother, and just so you know it means the world to me to have even placed, yet alone placed first. Thanks for the time and energy of sponsoring this contest - had to be very difficult to judge. I am deeply grateful. All the best, shar