Debbie Guzzi Poet Terza Rima

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Comin' Hame - Coming Home -Scottish Dialect

A angry sky, as cauld as Loch Lomon'
fair drew me out from cot o' peat, an' bed.
The wolves wus wailin', an' thund'r respond'd
Ah gather'd tam, me tartan, an' dug Red.
To  'orse ah took an' found the 'erd sam 'urt. 
The 'ungry wolves 'ad already fed. 
Inta the bi'er blaw, the rill ah skirt 
thro braes a white, t'ward ham an' fire burnin'
the bleatin' sheep, the 'orse an' ah alert.
We wud mak it hame, stomaches churnin'
O smell the peat fire on the wild wind now,
'ear the cows faint distant ca', a lowin'
'erself wud know, we'r near ta the brow.
Noo, we 'ad beat the storm hame, an' kep' me vow.



Dedicated to Jimbo Goff & James Fraser
and the spirit of Robin Burns

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Sara Kendrick February 4, 2014 at 11:28 AM Ahh!! Great quality poetry!! Way to go with this win..Congrats..Sara

Cherl Dunn February 3, 2014 at 8:16 PM Deart friend where have I've been but right here every night, lol you have but to leave me a comment and I'll reply, thank you for the compliment about becoming a bard, and glad you enjoyed my recent posting. cheri

Dr.Ram Mehta January 28, 2014 at 8:41 PM Love your approach to the theme and congrats on the win, Debbie

Joseph May January 28, 2014 at 6:08 PM Congrats on a fine win Debbie...

Shadow Hamilton January 28, 2014 at 5:48 PM Hi Debbie takes me back to Scotland good depiction congrats on win Shadow x smile hug

Isaiah Zerbst January 28, 2014 at 1:26 PM Not very familiar with Scottish dialect, so there were a few words that I did not understand. Other than that, this is a classic story. Very visual; makes me feel sorry for the poor fella. I just went out to feed the cows while it is snowing :) I'll say it does have a genuine feel about it. Debbie Guzzi January 28, 2014 at 3:43 PM should I put up the translation?

Gautami Phookan January 22, 2014 at 9:02 AM Ah, Debbie there you go again.. What a fine write! I dig this Scottish dialect here and I dig, and I dig the words..creating a beautiful pictorial landscape of Scotland! love and Smiles to you...

Michelle Mac Donald January 11, 2014 at 3:58 PM Oh man....."Lang May Yer Lum Reek!" LOL Doesn't translate the same as it looks, Debs :) ..."A Scottish salutation wishing long life and prosperity. Literally, long may your chimney smoke." They use it as a New Year's greeting. Hope all's well with you and yours! Love, Mikki

Kelly Deschler January 8, 2014 at 5:30 PM A very entertaining poem with great imagery. I love the Scottish accent that you added here. I hoped to travel to Scotland someday, and this poem took me there! Fantastic work, Debbie!....Thank you very much for the kind comments.

James Marshall Goff January 6, 2014 at 8:59 PM You know Deb....my great/great/great grandfather on my mom's side was an English Officer in the King's Regiment called "The Black Watch" that's how he met my Scottish great/great/great grandmama...he didn't join her to America in around 1862...she came with her son, alone, ended up in Chicago, where my oldest daughter lives and works!

James Marshall Goff January 6, 2014 at 8:49 PM 1st. You smartly tweaked my "2-liner" in yer blog...pulling personal "your" makes cleaner traditional (good) haiku....2nd. Every line above read like a needed transfusion for my very soul. Goin to mine faves...goin on my wall...goin everywhere! Found myself savoring every word like i never have here, sweet Lady! WOW...just jimbo

Tim B January 6, 2014 at 1:24 PM Ah this is charming, I love the Scottish dialect. Thanks for sharing a refreshing poem that is not inside the typical box.

Monterey Sirak January 6, 2014 at 6:50 AM You captured me with this piece. The language, the flavor, the images. Perfection.

Peter Dome January 5, 2014 at 6:28 PM As soon as I started reading this excellent piece, I thought Burns. lovely visuals, great use of language a joy to read; very well done. you are an inspiration to us all. best wishes. Pete.

Cherl Dunn January 4, 2014 at 5:59 PM Thank you for your help my friend, i don't care what others think, dear lady. cheri

Anne-Lise Andresen January 4, 2014 at 5:45 PM - A form I do not know about - but, you are skilled Debbie! - (Thanks for my win place in your last contest) - Have a enjoyable weekend. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

David Williams January 4, 2014 at 5:44 PM Debbie robbi would be proud…david

Cherl Dunn January 4, 2014 at 5:23 PM Love the flavor of this write, it has the fear of an eariler time period, you know right up my alley, lol.Enjoyed the thrill ride with you on the olden time express lol. Hey could you do me a favor my friend and i won't be offened with you say no i just posted one i'm not sure of could you give it a quick read for me and be honest if you think it needs more work. thank you dear cheri