David William Breidenthal Poet Free verse

Come Out

Now in the shadows a figure hides
Unmerciful rain collapses on my rooftops
The mind struggles to recollect lost senses
You take me on a victorious voyage to the Island of Paradise
Riding the waves of my intuition, I call for it
“Bring us the light at the end of the tunnel,”
I holler in the shade with Niagara Falls of hope
I hear you call to me gently in the dead of night
Why hide in the dust in the shame of frivolous defeat?
We graze in fields of forever gracious flowers as we lock hands
Don’t you worry—my patience is instilled in the dark
You elevate me higher than the clouds drifting wistfully
I trace your outline as my eyes acquaint with mystery
We have a slippery escape—a ride on a dolphin’s back
Staring…filled by the watery cadence
We sing merrily as we approach the trail of vitality
Trampled that you cannot accept my trust
The waves of the ocean bubbles us up with rare grace
I trace a detailed picture of you in the air
We ran faster than the breeze, rapidly brewing
I sketch in your panic eyes, furrowed gaze—and sigh
Give us words of wisdom to uplift our troubled souls
Not a cringe of movement, yet still I wait to create
We have to leap into the ring of fire—but how?
Imagination brought us together—now shadow, come out!
Let us be brave like the lion in the prairie…send us strength

Collaboration by my sister, Laura Breidenthal and David W. Breidenthal
*Laura: note: We wrote line after line without seeing the others' lines, and it actually came out quite nicely I think. : ) *
*David: It came out awesomely!!! Thanks for a well-written write with you, Laura!! xD *
April 28, 2014

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Duke Beaufort May 28, 2014 at 6:26 PM David, yes it did come out very well. I was teasing you when I last commented. I hope you were not offended. I did mean to emphasize just how talented I think you are. Very high level of talent, sir! David William Breidenthal October 6, 2014 at 9:21 PM Thanks for that pun, Duke. :) Naw problem. Honestly, I am teased daily by my friends and family, so I am used to it. So is my sister - full of talent.

Justin Bordner May 27, 2014 at 7:53 PM This is a btilliant collaboration David. I've already posted my heartfelt comment on Laura's page which celebrates your skill and soul! Immaculate friendship, there is so much care in this composition, and it is a FAV. my friend! J.A.B. David William Breidenthal October 6, 2014 at 9:20 PM Thank you, Justin! You're a pretty amazing poet yourself. Great way of describing a great piece like this.