Come Out

Now in the shadows a figure hides
Unmerciful rain collapses on my rooftops
The mind struggles to recollect lost senses
You take me on a victorious voyage to the Island of Paradise
Riding the waves of my intuition, I call for it
“Bring us the light at the end of the tunnel,”
I holler in the shade with Niagara Falls of hope
I hear you call to me gently in the dead of night
Why hide in the dust in the shame of frivolous defeat?
We graze in fields of forever gracious flowers as we lock hands
Don’t you worry—my patience is instilled in the dark
You elevate me higher than the clouds drifting wistfully
I trace your outline as my eyes acquaint with mystery
We have a slippery escape—a ride on a dolphin’s back
Staring…filled by the watery cadence
We sing merrily as we approach the trail of vitality
Trampled that you cannot accept my trust
The waves of the ocean bubbles us up with rare grace
I trace a detailed picture of you in the air
We ran faster than the breeze, rapidly brewing
I sketch in your panic eyes, furrowed gaze—and sigh
Give us words of wisdom to uplift our troubled souls
Not a cringe of movement, yet still I wait to create
We have to leap into the ring of fire—but how?
Imagination brought us together—now shadow, come out!
Let us be brave like the lion in the prairie…send us strength

Collaboration by Laura and David Breidenthal
*note: We wrote line after line without seeing the others' lines, and it actually came out quite nicely I think. : ) * 
April 28, 2014
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Beaufort Avatar
May 28, 2014 at 6:20 PM
You are both wonderful and talented!
Barton Avatar
May 27, 2014 at 1:13 PM
Wonderful write keep up the good work friend - Maddie
Bordner Avatar
May 27, 2014 at 1:40 AM
This composition is so beautiful in it's friendship! My eyes are damp, my heart beats vibrantly while feeling the genuine patience of true friendship. The tone, pace and imagery are so skillfully balanced herein Laura and David, I give you laurels for your true voices!!! I will be rereading this beauty many tims over, a FAV. J.A.B.
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