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Cold Winter Dim Veil

Days were the sunshine of life The days embraced your vision. A melodious yellow canary Hopping upon my window sill. You were the sleepy Winter that safely Wrapped a swaddle blanket over my nature Capturing the magic. You were the Autumn brush stokes that entwined The golden rod and pumpkin in the crisp leaves. The chocolate and blush on the trees, The chartreuse and peacock in the grass. You were the paper kite butterfly that sip The nectar of Spring crimson callistemon. Like a rainstorm with gusty winds, You blew away slicing my lace heart Piercing with your harshness Arctic breath. Cold frosty mornings around my window sill, When each time I exhale a dim veil breath, It disappears into the chilled air Of the muted visions you embraced. 2/1/2021 Break My Heart, Why Don't Cha Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Edward Ibeh

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Date: 2/8/2021 9:46:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. You certainly deserved it!
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Date: 2/3/2021 1:53:00 PM
Eve, this is a stunning poem. I felt the deep sadness! I think that's what writing is all about, for the reader to feel something or gain something from it. Congratulations on a well deserved win! :)
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Date: 2/3/2021 10:09:00 AM
I got lost in all those beautiful descriptive lines you penned Eve, come string time, the heat will melt that frost and bring you back all the colors of a lifetime. Praying for you every day, hope your feeling better hugs and kisses xo
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Date: 2/3/2021 7:07:00 AM
When each time I exhale a dim veil breath, It disappears into the chilled air Of the muted visions you embraced. This one made me feel your sadness. Great entry for contest. Many wonderful lines. Congratulations on your win, and best wishes for one more top win. Hugs Rama
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Date: 2/2/2021 11:04:00 AM
Eve, congratulations on your first place. Your lines are so color filled and have a lyrical movement to them. I can feel the breath on the frosty windowpane. Wonderfully done! :)
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Date: 2/2/2021 8:37:00 AM
Love this Eve. It's a heart stopper in that it depicts such a loving but rueful experience. So well worded.
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Date: 2/2/2021 8:34:00 AM
A beautiful poem of love that was and now lost Eve. Congratulations on your win ~ Belle
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Date: 2/2/2021 7:28:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. Love the way you took me through the year. "Beautiful" Have a blessed day with your win.................
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Date: 2/2/2021 3:24:00 AM
This is beautiful and lingers with so many rich, vibrant thoughts... breathtaking. God bless you always with love and prayers, Gina
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Date: 2/2/2021 3:00:00 AM
EXCELLENT. Congrats to win. Your poem touched my heart. Love.
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Date: 2/1/2021 5:10:00 PM
A great companion piece to Barbara Streisand's 'The Way We Were.' Such a poignant write, Eve! : gw
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Date: 2/1/2021 4:33:00 PM
wow, this is fantastic work, Eve. The imagery is outstanding, so I bet this will be a winner!
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Date: 2/1/2021 4:33:00 PM
captcha said "eva" your name in Spanish!
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Date: 2/1/2021 12:45:00 PM
I love your metaphorical view of lost love. Best for a win. ~~
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