Cobweb

Cobweb Patiently, intricately done A trap for the unwary spun With fine gossamer threads In patterned fashion spread By the use of fine technique Across networks of intrigue Causing chaos in the mind: Fault of nature or mankind? - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Word Vision Poetry iv Contest Hosted by Vermillion Scythe © 21st November 2018

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Angela Crabtree

Date: 12/21/2020 7:19:00 PM

I like your metaphor, Paul. Definitely the fault of mankind. Great poem! :)

Vladislav Raven

Date: 1/11/2019 3:32:00 PM

Hi Paul, excellentThe cobweb, written piece from your pen. An unwary trap for the unsuspecting. In life as in nature, the unwary traps are ever layed. This is such a meaningful write. This is such a strong, real write. You have put much into this excellent write my friend. I am glad I dropped by this piece this evening. A thought-provoking piece. Have a wonderful Friday. Your friend always....Mike.

Paul Callus
Date: 1/12/2019 7:44:00 AM

Your insightful comments are truly appreciated my friend...thank you! Hope you are enjoying the weekend. Regards // paul

Edlynn Nau

Date: 12/5/2018 10:13:00 PM

BRAVO Paul! This was a delight and you captured the paradox of spider as artist and hunter so magnificently. I know a ton of work went into this and it is evident in the grace!

Paul Callus
Date: 12/6/2018 12:02:00 PM

Many thanks, Edlynn. I love your insightful and encouraging feedback. Best regards // paul

Gershon Wolf

Date: 12/1/2018 7:49:00 PM

Well-spun! ~ Gershon

Paul Callus
Date: 12/2/2018 3:23:00 AM

Thank you, Gershon! Regards // paul

Besma Riabi Dziri

Date: 11/30/2018 10:34:00 AM

What a stunning work of human nature dipped in the wonders of poetry and wrapped in the power of words! "Cobweb" worthy of rereads and it lends itself to several readings.. Cobweb is a meticulous work of Nature.. a "chaos in the mind"! The last line is a work of Wisdom! A great pleasure to read your unique poetry Paul.. My deepest regards.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/30/2018 10:53:00 AM

Thank you, Besma. Your lovely critique groups together the main points of my poem. Always a pleasure to read what you have to say. ~ Warm regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 11/26/2018 4:08:00 PM

Excellent description, Paul, and I like the question posed at the end. Sending some winning wishes your way! Hugs, Carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 11/27/2018 3:54:00 AM

Pleased you enjoyed it, Carolyn. Thank you. Hope you are keeping well; take care. Love & Hugs // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 11/26/2018 10:12:00 AM

Hi Paul, Life is like a cobweb, a very interesting, clever and apt comparison. Just know you'll come out tops in this competition - good luck. Best wishes, Jennifer.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/27/2018 3:52:00 AM

Thank you, Jennifer, for the feedback and belief in this entry. Warm regards // paul

David Byrne

Date: 11/25/2018 7:54:00 PM

Nice point of view.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/26/2018 8:19:00 AM

Thank you, David. Regards // paul

Silent One

Date: 11/25/2018 8:02:00 AM

Great use of words Paul... You have way with those..

Paul Callus
Date: 11/25/2018 12:11:00 PM

Thank you, S-1. Pleased to see you around again. Regards // paul

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 11/25/2018 3:23:00 AM

You are always wonderful with words Paul, I fall for this again, mastery is your craft...love and hugs.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/25/2018 3:53:00 AM

You are too kind, my friend:) Thank you. It is a pleasure to see you back in circulation! Hope you are keeping well. Best regards, peace & love // paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/24/2018 2:02:00 PM

paul, you amaze with your metaphoric language, 'A trap for the unwary spun..' me likes!...huggs

Paul Callus
Date: 11/25/2018 3:40:00 AM

Thank you for your generosity, Nette. You grow me wings:) Hugs // paul

Pashang Salehi

Date: 11/24/2018 1:58:00 PM

Indeed the networks of intrigue... I enjoyed your thoughts...

Paul Callus
Date: 11/25/2018 3:38:00 AM

Thank you, Pashang; pleased that you enjoyed. Regards // paul

Supraja Kannan

Date: 11/24/2018 7:24:00 AM

This is so beautiful... Reads like a winner...

Paul Callus
Date: 11/24/2018 10:07:00 AM

So pleased you enjoyed it, Supraja; thank you. Regards // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 11/23/2018 4:24:00 PM

I love how the intrigue of your poem evolves and grows to reminding me of a neural network in your final two lines, Paul. Great question posed to end your spectacular poem. This is so very visual, deep, thoughtful and thought provoking. Excellent on many levels. Your intellect and poetic prowess does amaze me, my inspiring friend. Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes and hugs for you.. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 11/24/2018 10:06:00 AM

Thank you so much Susan for these very insightful comments. Always looking forward to your visits, my friend. ~ Warm regards and hugs // paul

Jack Horne

Date: 11/23/2018 3:06:00 PM

love this thoughtful write, my friend

Paul Callus
Date: 11/24/2018 10:03:00 AM

Thank you, Jack. Hope you're keeping well....no snow in Malta, and so far the weather is being warmly kind:) Regards // paul

Vijay Pandit

Date: 11/23/2018 6:48:00 AM

Their design is a piece of fine architecture ...and flawless execution... just like your poem Paul. Well done..best for a win.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/24/2018 10:02:00 AM

You are too kind, Vijay...thank you! Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/23/2018 6:02:00 AM

- A wonderful construction ... beautiful written, Paul - Best wishes and hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/24/2018 10:01:00 AM

Thank you, Anne-Lise. Have a lovely weekend:) Hugs // paul

Arthur Vaso

Date: 11/23/2018 2:30:00 AM

Very intriguing indeed!!! Makes one ponder.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/24/2018 9:26:00 AM

Thank you, Arthur. Spiders - plots - intrigues...they combine to set the imagination working. Regards // paul

Tom Cunningham

Date: 11/22/2018 5:00:00 PM

Fascinating to watch spiders at work, a marvel of nature. Well written Paul. Sometimes we feel that our lives are caught in a web. Good luck. Tom.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/24/2018 9:24:00 AM

So true, Tom. Thank you for reading and commenting. Regards // paul

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 11/22/2018 4:34:00 PM

Enjoyed, Paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/24/2018 9:13:00 AM

Thank you, Kim. Regards // paul

Sherry Asbury

Date: 11/22/2018 4:21:00 PM

I so enjoyed this poem...I am intrigued by the spider and its webs...have seen Charlotte's Web so many times. Have read on the silk trade and find it spellbinding. This is a web of fine words woven...

Paul Callus
Date: 11/22/2018 5:04:00 PM

I am pleased that you liked it, Sherry. Thanks to my g'daughter I have read the story of Wilbur the pig who befriended Charlotte the spider. Thank you for stopping by...pleased to make your acquaintance. // paul

Constance La France

Date: 11/22/2018 4:20:00 PM

Paul, a wonderful rhyme poem for the contest, best of luck ~

Paul Callus
Date: 11/22/2018 4:45:00 PM

Thank you, Constance; good luck wishes are always appreciated. Regards // paul