Coagulation

Poet's Notes

(Show)

Become a Premium Member and post notes and photos about your poem like Len Gasun.

March 31, 2024 17.54pm

Finally my blood began to coagulate
When you stopped doing what I hate
If not, expect the most unpleasant state
Of things from lightest to highest skate.

You should never ever be late
Whenever you invited me for a date
I’m a girlfriend who’s impatient to wait
My boredom is always at the zenith of rate.

Usual lines played like songs from Kate
On ears of her most devoted suitor, Nate
But, biggest surprise suddenly came in crate
Carried by young men marching from the gate.

Men with all kinds of roses started to sate
Her doubtful heart making his proposal to escalate
A wonderful rite performed by each of his mate
To win successfully a wife, cutting their late dates’ fate.

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Yolanda Nicholsen

Date: 4/17/2024 5:03:00 AM

Thos is a lovely write enjoyed reading your poem here.

Len Gasun
Date: 4/21/2024 5:21:00 PM

Thank you so much for reading my poem my dear poet friend and your uplifting words. So much appreciated. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 4/14/2024 9:37:00 AM

Your "Coagulation" is a wonderful write. Love your line, "You should never ever be late Whenever you invited me for a date" So very true. Be on time or early. Wish you would write more. I know you are very busy. Hope you are OK... Have a very blessed day/week writing away..........

Len Gasun
Date: 4/20/2024 4:24:00 PM

Thank you so much my dearest poet friend Paula for your precious time reading my poem, your uplifting comments, understanding and wonderful wishes. Giving back more wishes to you. Finally, I'm on vacation now and I'll try my best to be here more often. Missing you and all here. God bless you and your writings. Hugs

Christina Bowring

Date: 4/4/2024 3:41:00 PM

Dear sweet Len, this is a wonderful monorhyme with great flow and rhyme. You can sense the agitation and expectation here of the narrator and sympathise. I don’t like tardiness so I’m with them on that one! I love the last stanza especially with the proposal and a wedding. Really enjoyed it . Hope you are well dear friend and got some time to rest. Hugs to you xx

Len Gasun
Date: 4/20/2024 4:12:00 PM

Thank you so much for your precious time reading my poem my dear poet friend Christina and your uplifting comments. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs

Silent One

Date: 3/31/2024 4:29:00 AM

Your poem effectively conveys the emotional journey of the speaker, from frustration to joy, while also touching upon themes of romance and commitment. The imagery and language choices contribute to the poem's impact, making it a compelling read.

Len Gasun
Date: 4/20/2024 3:54:00 PM

Thank you so much my dear poet friend SO for your precious time reading my poem, your insightful ideas and uplifting words. May God bless you always. Hugs