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Clouded Answers

Seeing a cloud float from child eyes and the recognition 
     The light up moment of clarity smiling wide the definition
          Proud parent on graduation day notices too much ambition
               Listening to that little voice that haunts you with suspicion
                    As an adult comes realization that life is not an exhibition
                         Looking up now and that old cloud is still just passing by
                              The light up moment of clarity smiling wide the definition
                                    In search of mindful answers to basic questions like why

                                   What answers are so in need to gain one life perfection
                              Open up your eyes and see they point in the right direction
                         You have to want to stop suffering take a moment of reflection
                    Use your mind to problem solve answering the needed correction
               Instead of staring at clouds seeking some childhood protection
         Although a meaningful memory it is not the cloud seen now
    Open up your eyes and see they point in the right direction
No need in asking memory clouds questions of life anyhow

All tools needed to succeed in life are right there inside yourself



                                                          11/02/17
                                   Written for contest: "Rhyme Time II"
                                               Hosted by: Laura Loo 

                              Won 1st Place in Contest Results

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 12/2/2017 9:57:00 AM
Congrats on such a well deserved win! Beautifully expressed!
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Brian Davey
Date: 12/15/2017 4:35:00 PM
Thank you so much melissa
Date: 11/26/2017 7:36:00 AM
An outstanding poem, Brian. Congratulations on your First Place win! Sandra
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Brian Davey
Date: 11/26/2017 7:52:00 AM
Thank you so much Sandra
Date: 11/25/2017 7:13:00 AM
perfect rhythm and rhyme dear Brian! congrats on your top placement :)
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Brian Davey
Date: 11/26/2017 7:52:00 AM
Thank you as always Laura I appreciate you!
Date: 11/24/2017 8:14:00 PM
Brian, congratulations on your win with this beautifully written poem. Excellent!
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Brian Davey
Date: 11/25/2017 12:50:00 PM
Thanks Eve
Date: 11/23/2017 5:59:00 AM
Back for congrats!!
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Brian Davey
Date: 11/25/2017 12:50:00 PM
Thanks again Kim
Date: 11/22/2017 10:07:00 PM
Congratulations Brian on your first place win with your beautifully written poem. Excellent!
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Brian Davey
Date: 11/23/2017 1:11:00 AM
Thank you so much Susan I appreciate you!
Date: 11/22/2017 4:57:00 PM
beautiful poem Brian and I love that line that ties the 2 stanzas together and the formatting is superb:-) congratulations on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Brian Davey
Date: 11/23/2017 1:11:00 AM
Oh Jan I just think you are the best est ever, thank you for ago of your kind words and insight always willing to share freely
Date: 11/22/2017 3:53:00 PM
Wonderful write, Brian, I enjoyed this very much ... congrats on your win!
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Brian Davey
Date: 11/22/2017 5:22:00 PM
Thank you Gregory always a pleasure when you comment on my work
Date: 11/22/2017 12:18:00 PM
How inspiring ! If this poem is prescribed in the syllabus of high school ,I expect some significant changes towards light! Congratulation!
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Brian Davey
Date: 11/22/2017 5:21:00 PM
Wow thank you so very much for such inspiring feedback I appreciate it more than you know!
Date: 11/14/2017 4:59:00 PM
Now this is you at your best so many hiddenmeanings in the meaning of this poem! Awesome
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Brian Davey
Date: 11/15/2017 5:03:00 PM
Thank you kind Sir your insight is always appreciated
Date: 11/3/2017 9:03:00 AM
Oh, Brian, this is so wonderful! Expecting to see you in the grand heights, with this one!!
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Brian Davey
Date: 11/3/2017 10:46:00 AM
Thank you very much Kim I am hoping that it does well also

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