Clouded Answers

Seeing a cloud float from child eyes and the recognition 
     The light up moment of clarity smiling wide the definition
          Proud parent on graduation day notices too much ambition
               Listening to that little voice that haunts you with suspicion
                    As an adult comes realization that life is not an exhibition
                         Looking up now and that old cloud is still just passing by
                              The light up moment of clarity smiling wide the definition
                                    In search of mindful answers to basic questions like why

                                   What answers are so in need to gain one life perfection
                              Open up your eyes and see they point in the right direction
                         You have to want to stop suffering take a moment of reflection
                    Use your mind to problem solve answering the needed correction
               Instead of staring at clouds seeking some childhood protection
         Although a meaningful memory it is not the cloud seen now
    Open up your eyes and see they point in the right direction
No need in asking memory clouds questions of life anyhow

All tools needed to succeed in life are right there inside yourself



                                                          11/02/17
                                   Written for contest: "Rhyme Time II"
                                               Hosted by: Laura Loo 

                              Won 1st Place in Contest Results
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Tracy Avatar
December 2, 2017 at 9:57 AM
Congrats on such a well deserved win! Beautifully expressed!
Davey Avatar
December 15, 2017 at 4:35 PM
Thank you so much melissa
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November 26, 2017 at 7:36 AM
An outstanding poem, Brian. Congratulations on your First Place win! Sandra
Davey Avatar
November 26, 2017 at 7:52 AM
Thank you so much Sandra
Scars Avatar
November 25, 2017 at 7:13 AM
perfect rhythm and rhyme dear Brian! congrats on your top placement :)
Davey Avatar
November 26, 2017 at 7:52 AM
Thank you as always Laura I appreciate you!
Roper Avatar
November 24, 2017 at 8:14 PM
Brian, congratulations on your win with this beautifully written poem. Excellent!
Davey Avatar
November 25, 2017 at 12:50 PM
Thanks Eve
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November 23, 2017 at 5:59 AM
Back for congrats!!
Davey Avatar
November 25, 2017 at 12:50 PM
Thanks again Kim
Ashley Avatar
November 22, 2017 at 10:07 PM
Congratulations Brian on your first place win with your beautifully written poem. Excellent!
Davey Avatar
November 23, 2017 at 1:11 AM
Thank you so much Susan I appreciate you!
Allison Avatar
November 22, 2017 at 4:57 PM
beautiful poem Brian and I love that line that ties the 2 stanzas together and the formatting is superb:-) congratulations on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
Davey Avatar
November 23, 2017 at 1:11 AM
Oh Jan I just think you are the best est ever, thank you for ago of your kind words and insight always willing to share freely
Barden Avatar
November 22, 2017 at 3:53 PM
Wonderful write, Brian, I enjoyed this very much ... congrats on your win!
Davey Avatar
November 22, 2017 at 5:22 PM
Thank you Gregory always a pleasure when you comment on my work
Chand Avatar
November 22, 2017 at 12:18 PM
How inspiring ! If this poem is prescribed in the syllabus of high school ,I expect some significant changes towards light! Congratulation!
Davey Avatar
November 22, 2017 at 5:21 PM
Wow thank you so very much for such inspiring feedback I appreciate it more than you know!
Knight Avatar
November 14, 2017 at 4:59 PM
Now this is you at your best so many hiddenmeanings in the meaning of this poem! Awesome
Davey Avatar
November 15, 2017 at 5:03 PM
Thank you kind Sir your insight is always appreciated
Rodrigues Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 9:03 AM
Oh, Brian, this is so wonderful! Expecting to see you in the grand heights, with this one!!
Davey Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 10:46 AM
Thank you very much Kim I am hoping that it does well also
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