Cloud 5

Falling from cloud 10 (a self rejection collaboration) 

King Mandalay!

Poet Destroyer, I want to tell you this 
My heart is not ready to sing
I will always seal my love to you with a final kiss
So you can always feel you were once my everything 
 
I am sorry I was too much for you on your lonely night
My ego is too strong for you to be with someone like me 
Sorry, my heart beat will set you on cloud five away from the light 
It's not you my love I need more dots to see
 
PD, It is not easy to feel overzealous
I became paranoid with this system that  glistens
A friendship I destroyed by the thought that made me jealous
P.D., I don't think we could ever be friends I never did listens 

My ways ruined the perfect expression of a perfect emotion 
Once again what could have been a nurtured affection I ended
You will never again see the moon to my ocean
I will leave you now on cloud 5 hoping you don't feel offended
 
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Poet Destroyer
 
King Mandalay, you’re my love and will always be my desire 
With an endless world of possibilities you will forever own my heart 
My heart for you will always burn with an eternal fire
I place my hand on my broken heart to another lonely street
 
Never will my heart beat feel complete
You were such a gift I did not want to live without 
Without you I will go back to my cloud 5 the abyss of delete
I gave you my heart to the fullest, now why so much doubt? 
 
King Mandalay, you spin my head round and round
Like a kaleidoscope ever color will crash above
You dropped my heart from cloud 10 right into the  ground
Our friendship connected our fate into a promise of broken love
 
The gravity between me and you was really true in my heart 
My lost emotions will break my unity to survive
You are the devil who ripped out my best body part
My energy will dive back into cloud 5 where life in no longer alive


             CLOUD 5
       COLLABORATION

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 11/29/2016 4:48:00 AM
Cool poem about a failed relationship. The twin binoculars of two poetic voices gives a better clarity than one set of eyes can. Drop the mic, double delight poem, PD and King Mandalay. Much love to ya both.
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Date: 1/29/2016 3:06:00 PM
This was quite a creative idea to do a double take, Linda! No relationship is free of bumps and hiccups, otherwise it would simply peter out! I wonder what it's like on cloud 5!:) Hugs // paul
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Date: 9/17/2014 10:04:00 PM
Well, I want you to know that being with you on cloud 5 could well equal the feeling I would have on cloud 9..... my respects to King, of course..... Congrats on your win... Jake
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Date: 9/15/2014 11:28:00 AM
Good a.m. my loving sis! This is another truly amazing masterpiece! Another great poem deep from the heart of a very awesome and great poet. I'm glad I've found it in winner's list in one of d recent contests. I know there are still priceless gems of yours that i've missed. CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved top win! Biggest hugs & cheers! By d way, hope everythin is doin well with u. Tyssm for the sweet reply d other day. Sending u many hugs! lovem4evrLeo
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Date: 9/13/2014 5:37:00 PM
Linda this is stunning, simply stunning. Congrats on a masterful write
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Date: 9/12/2014 9:14:00 PM
Splendid write PD n a super win! Big congrats!
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Date: 9/12/2014 2:56:00 PM
Congrats on your superb win, my *friend. Loved always,bl
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Date: 9/12/2014 1:56:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in Regina's contest. -JT
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Date: 9/12/2014 12:04:00 PM
Hi PD, congratulations on your great win! Excellent write! Well-deserved! Pandita
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Date: 9/12/2014 10:48:00 AM
Thank you Regina, for the lovely win... YEAH.... Congrats to me... :) PD
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Date: 9/12/2014 9:57:00 AM
One doesn't think of internal rejection....but in your unique twist, and style, you nailed it ! Congrats on your win, PD !!
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Date: 9/12/2014 9:46:00 AM
Nice collaboration Linda. Congrats on the win,
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Date: 9/12/2014 6:16:00 AM
Congratulations on this wonderfully written poem and top spot win.
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Date: 9/11/2014 10:54:00 PM
Congratulations on your win... I love it and you, Love and prayers and thanks for entering the contest, Gina
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Date: 4/3/2014 9:25:00 PM
regarding your remark on my rhyme battle win. Yep, Finally I made it on one of her lists (after trying four times) and got a big HM. I am overjoyed. hahaha. Luv ya!!
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Date: 4/25/2012 8:40:00 AM
Congrats on your win xD :)
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Date: 4/6/2012 5:59:00 PM
Awesome and wonderful piece,PD.Congrats on your well deserved win.....I love this Piece lady...Hmm really dramatic....
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Date: 4/4/2012 11:40:00 PM
I sure remember this one, Irma. Congratulations on a well deserved win.
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Date: 4/4/2012 8:12:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win!
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Date: 4/4/2012 7:09:00 AM
congrats on your win :)
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Date: 4/3/2012 11:25:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Nathan's contest Dear P.D. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/3/2012 9:15:00 AM
everyone re-reading this... i want you toooo know, I created both sides of the collaborations... this was one of them sad times... me and Nathan, got mad for the first time.. so i went and destroyer our cloud 10 poem... King Mandalay, is a make believe person... always..pd
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Date: 4/3/2012 9:09:00 AM
Congrats on your well deserved win, P.D. Outstanding piece. Enjoyed. Nice going, my friend. luv and huggs, Ralphie
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Date: 4/3/2012 8:23:00 AM
congrats, ;-) how can I forget how mad you went, and destroyer our Cloud 10 xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxooxo Nate
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Date: 10/21/2011 11:22:00 AM
Here is one from happier times? Irma, what is this I just read you over at cory's poem talking about wanting to die or something? Gosh, you must really be bummed lately! well, I hope things turn around for you. I better get off here finally. LUv, Andrea
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