Closed Door

the door has been closed
it has been bolted and locked
don't try the window

my heart is secure
your words are no longer "keys"
soul sanctuary

image is tarnished
no longer will I welcome
a fallen hero

Eileen Manassian

darkdeathherosenryu

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Donna Jones

March 8, 2015 at 7:04 PM

Hello my dear...these are moving combination of thoughts...touched me....

Paul Callus

March 8, 2015 at 3:07 PM

Lovely string of senryu, Eileen. Here you are being strict, but knowing you, you might still give this 'poor' fellow another chance:) hugs // paul

Eileen Manassian

March 8, 2015 at 3:09 PM

HA HA! Paul....You are a tease. Do you mean, I don't mean what I say? Write? ;) Mr Callus....I do declare.

Demetrios Trifiatis

March 8, 2015 at 10:56 AM

The fortress will unconquered remain till heart's combination by a new hero is found! An imposing and Majestic Senryu dear Eileen!

Eileen Manassian

March 8, 2015 at 1:12 PM

Thank you, my dear gracious poet. You have done many heroic deeds that I know of. May God bless you for your concern for the plight of humanity. HUGS and filakia

Richard Lamoureux

March 8, 2015 at 8:58 AM

I am curious to what motivated this write. I must admit I don't entirely understand it. This form is normally humorous so I have to admit it leaves me somewhat perplexed.

Eileen Manassian

March 8, 2015 at 9:04 AM

Hi, Richard. Glad you passed by. I'm so so tired. Just finished cleaning up after a big family lunch. My back hurts.... :( About the poem...I wasn't aware that senryu was supposed to be humorous. I thought it was a reflection of life. I'm very enamored by words. Too much so. This poem is stating that words will no longer sway better judgment. That's all I can say on this write. Thanks for visiting, my dear. You are hero material.

Shane Cooper

March 7, 2015 at 7:15 PM

my Enchantress, None are perfect in this grey world and the discovery that one you have idolised is only in the end just as fallible as all others is heart breaking. But to lock you heart to their words is to deny their redemption. As ilene said this is a style that I have not seen from you before, it has a hardness to it that speaks of implacability. It is a great write but it worries me a little. love Shane xxx

Eileen Manassian

March 8, 2015 at 9:05 AM

Don't worry, Shane. I'll live! :) Thanks for being there for support. I'm a softie, but now and again....I have to roar, just to know I still can. Hugs...Will get back to you soon....