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This is a fiction poem, but when I wrote this poem I was thinking about somebody. Somebody that I appreciate with all my heart. And this is my tribute to him. I upload a music piece to go with. Very important to share
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A wise old man standing up there, on the cliffs, thinking about all his life and mistakes. Everything he did wrong, everything he did right. A sad and honorable man, feeling blue, wanted to jump to the dark and cold waters to disappear forever into the ocean. I couldn't understand why. I could not understand what the problem was with him. I managed to take him to a tabern. We had some drink and we talked a lot. This man was a honorable teacher, teaching from wrong to right. His wife squeezed him to get the best juice from him. His daughters were abducted by an evil mum, while he had no chance. He was standing up on the cliffs, watching the waves, watching the cold sea, ready to jump. I told him to come with me, I told him, I will be all ears for him to be listened to. An old teacher, an old man taught me a lesson. A young teacher told him another lesson. We all have to learn, from old and young people. By the way, he didn't jump in the end. Now we are friends, we talk a lot on the cliffs, watching the sea in its mood. We have our way.

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Date: 10/21/2023 10:05:00 AM
What a thought provoking, descriptive, fictional piece dear Maria. I love the choice of music which is so perfectly paired with your writing. Such profound lines, ‘cold waters to disappear forever into the ocean’. You draw the reader in so well so that you can so easily visualise the cliffs, man and the deep ocean below. I love the last stanza. It’s true all ages can teach valuable lessons. ‘watching the sea in its mood’ - gorgeous! Hope you are having a lovely weekend dear, sweet Maria.
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Maria Fernandez-Garcia
Date: 10/21/2023 12:12:00 PM
Good evening Christina. Thank you very much for your sweet words. I appreciate them. Have a great weekend you too. Hugsxxxxx
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Christina Bowring
Date: 10/21/2023 10:05:00 AM
Hugs and love to you xx
Date: 10/20/2023 3:15:00 PM
your fictional poem speaks volumes about folks who feel as if they're on the edge. The old man's plight saddened me. A wonderful read...enjoy your weekend, Sara
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Maria Fernandez-Garcia
Date: 10/21/2023 12:09:00 AM
Good morning Sara. Thanks a lot for your nice comment. Blessingsxxx
Date: 10/20/2023 8:08:00 AM
any poem that takes you to a logical solution is a joy to read.....thank you
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Maria Fernandez-Garcia
Date: 10/20/2023 8:55:00 AM
Any person that reads my poems deserves 5 stars..hehe.(joking) or maybe true. Anyway Timothy, I really appreciate your comment. My poem is fiction, but I met people on the edge. Thank you my love. Hugs
Date: 10/19/2023 1:58:00 AM
You performed a charitable deed. You saved a soul from suicide and made a friend. Well done. Blessings.
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Maria Fernandez-Garcia
Date: 10/19/2023 2:31:00 AM
Thank you very much for your comment Victor. Have a lovely day...!
Date: 10/18/2023 7:02:00 PM
Well done, Maria! No one needs to have their sights set on the bottom of a cliff!
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Maria Fernandez-Garcia
Date: 10/19/2023 12:14:00 AM
You are right Kim. Thank you so much.
Date: 10/18/2023 4:16:00 PM
very important message, that i discover, i love it, what a precious penning, thanks Maria for the beautiful poem, talented pennning indeed yann
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Maria Fernandez-Garcia
Date: 10/18/2023 4:22:00 PM
Thank you Yann. Hugs

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