Clandestine Hours

This empty space waits, along a dim marsh
where paramour hides from tints of red dew,
and crackling boughs grip like a whiplash
on venial sins of passion, long the slew.
 
Her pace quickens to reach Eden's boulder
weighing low, chained by raked emotion
knowing not why ecstacy grips a dare;
as ravens swoop in twilight procession.
 
The illlicit hours reel a tempting game
venial sins genuflect without relief,
that holy stars warp in foiled cellophane
while gangrene clouds dodge like a hidden thief.
 
Her secret man appears, bearing moon’s core
to flame clandestine hours into moans' thrill
there, shadows quench for more of rain's downpour
as pleasure and pain mix a tyrst, fulfilled.

Gothic or Romantic Old/ New, Giorgio V.'s Contest
* Gothic Romanticism
by nette onclaud

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 10/24/2013 6:11:00 PM
Very gothic and very romantic! I love the detailed imagery in this poem. Amazing work, Nette! No wonder this placed first in Giorgio's contest! Congratulations on your well deserved win!...Thank you very much for the wonderful comments! I truly appreciate it!
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Date: 10/23/2013 5:05:00 PM
Congrad's on your WIN, Light & Love
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Date: 10/23/2013 3:07:00 PM
Love this Nette congrats on a fine win Shadow x smile
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Date: 10/23/2013 11:22:00 AM
Hi Nette, CONGRATS in Giorgio's awesome "Gothic or Romantic contest" enjoy your day.................... LOVE -- SKAT
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Date: 10/23/2013 11:00:00 AM
Superb beyond measure. Thrilling imagery and clandestine, indeed. Congrats on the well deserved win
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Date: 10/23/2013 10:41:00 AM
One to be read again and again! Congrats on your win, Nette!! Love and blessings, Rhonda
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Date: 10/23/2013 10:34:00 AM
Wow........."venial sins genuflect without relief"........ wherever words like these arrive.......I would love to know ........amazing you are!
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Date: 10/23/2013 7:10:00 AM
Congrats on the win in the contest, nette
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Date: 10/23/2013 1:23:00 AM
I came back to Congratulate you..Rereading the second time..even more beautiful! : )Just like your heart!!!
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Date: 10/22/2013 9:47:00 PM
your win is wonderful...PD
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Date: 10/22/2013 8:53:00 PM
Nette, Beautiful, crytic poem. I really enjoyed the read. Contrats on your win CTB
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Date: 10/22/2013 7:11:00 PM
congrats on your win...loved this one the first time I read it...enjoyed reading it again...hugs :)
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Date: 10/21/2013 10:29:00 AM
This is a great poem and I'm sure it will do good in the contest. Thanks for sharing... Lucilla
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Date: 10/21/2013 12:31:00 AM
What a rush! The vibe off these lines were so impacting to my eyes. Awesome job!
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Date: 10/20/2013 1:31:00 PM
Oooo eeee girl.......nice.......:-)
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Date: 10/20/2013 11:23:00 AM
Hi, Nette! I really enjoyed reading this piece. It's one of the very few ones I've encountered that's written today but very much feels like it's from old long ago. I love the impeccable imagery and the way it flows. Glad to encounter a fellow Filipino on this site. \m/
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Date: 10/20/2013 9:25:00 AM
Giorgio is going to love this poem Nette..Shadows quench for more of rain s downpour as pleasure and pain mix a tyrst..I love these verses and the clandestiene feeling in this post : )
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Date: 10/20/2013 8:01:00 AM
I enjoyed this write Nette gl in contest Shadow x smile
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Date: 10/20/2013 6:47:00 AM
Interesting work..Enjoyed reading this one today..Gangrene clouds now that is scary..The Gothic must be like the Adam's family..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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Date: 10/20/2013 6:33:00 AM
- One of your specialties .... Unique and wonderful, Nette ! - Luck in contest !!! - Have a fine Sunday - xoxo // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 10/19/2013 11:11:00 PM
Secret trysts and goings on not for the faint-hearted! Your imagery is flawless as always Nette..best wishes for the contest...luv,Deb
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Date: 10/19/2013 9:05:00 PM
Did you sneak some dark imagery here within this one Nette? I love what you have done with this write my friend! I truly enjoyed reading this amazing poem this evening! What a brilliant piece, Great Work!!
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Date: 10/19/2013 8:41:00 PM
This poem oozes dark secrets from every pore, very atmospheric Nette, I hope this does well for you in the contest. Take care, Richard
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Date: 10/19/2013 5:32:00 PM
Hi Nette, Lovely write..Glad I stopped by.. Ken
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Date: 10/19/2013 5:28:00 PM
your poetry never disappoints...always so many unique images and beautiful lines... excellent poem Nette :)
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