Clandestine Hours

This empty space waits, along a dim marsh
where paramour hides from tints of red dew,
and crackling boughs grip like a whiplash
on venial sins of passion, long the slew.
 
Her pace quickens to reach Eden's boulder
weighing low, chained by raked emotion
knowing not why ecstacy grips a dare;
as ravens swoop in twilight procession.
 
The illlicit hours reel a tempting game
venial sins genuflect without relief,
that holy stars warp in foiled cellophane
while gangrene clouds dodge like a hidden thief.
 
Her secret man appears, bearing moon’s core
to flame clandestine hours into moans' thrill
there, shadows quench for more of rain's downpour
as pleasure and pain mix a tyrst, fulfilled.

Gothic or Romantic Old/ New, Giorgio V.'s Contest
* Gothic Romanticism
by nette onclaud
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Deschler Avatar
October 24, 2013 at 6:11 PM
Very gothic and very romantic! I love the detailed imagery in this poem. Amazing work, Nette! No wonder this placed first in Giorgio's contest! Congratulations on your well deserved win!...Thank you very much for the wonderful comments! I truly appreciate it!
Guzzi Avatar
October 23, 2013 at 5:05 PM
Congrad's on your WIN, Light & Love
Hamilton Avatar
October 23, 2013 at 3:07 PM
Love this Nette congrats on a fine win Shadow x smile
A  Avatar
October 23, 2013 at 11:22 AM
Hi Nette, CONGRATS in Giorgio's awesome "Gothic or Romantic contest" enjoy your day.................... LOVE -- SKAT
Anglesey Avatar
October 23, 2013 at 11:00 AM
Superb beyond measure. Thrilling imagery and clandestine, indeed. Congrats on the well deserved win
Johnson-Saunders Avatar
October 23, 2013 at 10:41 AM
One to be read again and again! Congrats on your win, Nette!! Love and blessings, Rhonda
Richards Avatar
October 23, 2013 at 10:34 AM
Wow........."venial sins genuflect without relief"........ wherever words like these arrive.......I would love to know ........amazing you are!
Mehta Avatar
October 23, 2013 at 7:10 AM
Congrats on the win in the contest, nette
Chircop Avatar
October 23, 2013 at 1:23 AM
I came back to Congratulate you..Rereading the second time..even more beautiful! : )Just like your heart!!!
A   Avatar
October 22, 2013 at 9:47 PM
your win is wonderful...PD
Britt Avatar
October 22, 2013 at 8:53 PM
Nette, Beautiful, crytic poem. I really enjoyed the read. Contrats on your win CTB
Adams Avatar
October 22, 2013 at 7:11 PM
congrats on your win...loved this one the first time I read it...enjoyed reading it again...hugs :)
Carrillo Avatar
October 21, 2013 at 10:29 AM
This is a great poem and I'm sure it will do good in the contest. Thanks for sharing... Lucilla
Tacito Avatar
October 21, 2013 at 12:31 AM
What a rush! The vibe off these lines were so impacting to my eyes. Awesome job!
Jones Avatar
October 20, 2013 at 1:31 PM
Oooo eeee girl.......nice.......:-)
Ponce Avatar
October 20, 2013 at 11:23 AM
Hi, Nette! I really enjoyed reading this piece. It's one of the very few ones I've encountered that's written today but very much feels like it's from old long ago. I love the impeccable imagery and the way it flows. Glad to encounter a fellow Filipino on this site. \m/
Chircop Avatar
October 20, 2013 at 9:25 AM
Giorgio is going to love this poem Nette..Shadows quench for more of rain s downpour as pleasure and pain mix a tyrst..I love these verses and the clandestiene feeling in this post : )
Hamilton Avatar
October 20, 2013 at 8:01 AM
I enjoyed this write Nette gl in contest Shadow x smile
Kendrick Avatar
October 20, 2013 at 6:47 AM
Interesting work..Enjoyed reading this one today..Gangrene clouds now that is scary..The Gothic must be like the Adam's family..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
Andresen Avatar
October 20, 2013 at 6:33 AM
- One of your specialties .... Unique and wonderful, Nette ! - Luck in contest !!! - Have a fine Sunday - xoxo // Anne-Lise :)
Wilson Avatar
October 19, 2013 at 11:11 PM
Secret trysts and goings on not for the faint-hearted! Your imagery is flawless as always Nette..best wishes for the contest...luv,Deb
Sivey Avatar
October 19, 2013 at 9:05 PM
Did you sneak some dark imagery here within this one Nette? I love what you have done with this write my friend! I truly enjoyed reading this amazing poem this evening! What a brilliant piece, Great Work!!
Seal Avatar
October 19, 2013 at 8:41 PM
This poem oozes dark secrets from every pore, very atmospheric Nette, I hope this does well for you in the contest. Take care, Richard
Carroll Avatar
October 19, 2013 at 5:32 PM
Hi Nette, Lovely write..Glad I stopped by.. Ken
Adams Avatar
October 19, 2013 at 5:28 PM
your poetry never disappoints...always so many unique images and beautiful lines... excellent poem Nette :)
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