City of My Birth, Agleam

The jam of guitars floods a moonlit trail

    Dizzy where tangy hyacinths delight…

  Folks  prancing on rhumba beats to unveil

My city agleam...near a harbor bright.




Rithimus Divisa 9 Contest of Gregory R Barden
Taken from the poem ' Pulse of Manila'
Submitted 10/11/2020

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Jennifer Fenn

March 8, 2021 at 1:55 PM

Wow! I want to go to Manila!

John Hamilton

October 12, 2020 at 12:50 PM

Sounds like a great place Nette from your description, a wonderfully phrased poem. I know why Greg loves Manila, most of his music fans are from there, did you know he's working on a new song for his album called Filipina girl?

Sam Kauffman

October 12, 2020 at 10:35 AM

I can feel the soul of your city in your words, Nette - the guitars, fragrance of the hyacinth, the rhumba beat and the lights reflected in the water and in the action expressed in floods, dizzy, prancing, agleam. Congratulations on your well deserved win!

Susan Ashley

October 12, 2020 at 9:11 AM

As always, Nette, your graceful pen has the power to sweep me up and away with beautiful imagery and emotion. I love the vibrant and proud spirit of this piece. Congratulations for your excellent win.. ~Susan

Silent One

October 12, 2020 at 7:02 AM

Nice imagery in only four lines... Awesome.

Heidi Sands

October 12, 2020 at 6:40 AM

So beautiful Nette! Congratulations :)

Beata Agustin

October 12, 2020 at 5:54 AM

Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this, and the photo likewise. God bless you.

Gregory Richard Barden

October 12, 2020 at 4:30 AM

Exquisite write about Manila, Nette, and such a worthy winner - I love that city, (and that country) - congratulations, and thanks for taking the time to enter my Rithimus Divisa 9 contest. Blessings! :o) <3

Nette Onclaud

March 23, 2021 at 12:20 AM

i've been out,for s while... will send you a pm when i get the time... thanks, greg... huggs!