City Noir

The sidewalks sweat on August nights
Typewriter pounds as city heats
A neon sheen imbues the blight
	
Alone I smoke with soul contrite
An ashtray's blush, belies discrete 
The sidewalks sweat on August nights

An earring left at passion’s height 
Rewinds the yearn of lust replete
A neon sheen imbues the blight

Impaled I bleed this city's spite
In brooding mirth I ooze conceit
The sidewalks sweat on August nights

An airline ticket beckons flight
With whispered lies of comforts sweet
A neon sheen imbues the blight

It’s here I glean the rage to write
Extracting marrow from the street
The sidewalks sweat on August nights
A neon sheen imbues the blight

Chopped III Contest
Including:
A typewriter
An ashtray full of cigarette butts (some with lipstick on them)
A single gold earring
An airline ticket (new or used)

09 Dec 2014
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Guzzi Avatar
February 7, 2015 at 8:04 PM
Very good use of form, the city can be very inspiring, perspective is everything! Light & Love
Enriquez Avatar
December 31, 2014 at 8:20 AM
Dear David: Thank you for your support. All the best for the New Year. Leon
Lamoureux Avatar
December 29, 2014 at 9:43 AM
I love it David Congratulations.
A   Avatar
December 26, 2014 at 11:00 PM
DAVID, congratulations in Craigs C., chopped contest.... LUV LINDA
Jerden Avatar
December 23, 2014 at 4:34 PM
Awesome villanelle. I had considered a film noir theme also, but couldn't get past the private eye cliches, so switched it. Loved the rewind line in particular with the play on yearn/yarn.
A. Sharma Avatar
December 22, 2014 at 9:03 PM
Perfect for the challenge David! Congrats on big win!
Richards Avatar
December 22, 2014 at 9:11 AM
Each element of this contest, invites the word "noir"... and you blended the image in my mind to perfection. Love this! A blend of each required challenge. Great job! Happy Holidays to you, David!
Yvonne Avatar
December 21, 2014 at 8:43 PM
Congratulations David on your well deserved win with this stunning Villanelle.
Allison Avatar
December 21, 2014 at 3:42 PM
love the imagery and the repeated lines - congrats:-) Hugs jan xx
Mohn Avatar
December 21, 2014 at 4:08 PM
Thanks so much Jan...have a magical Christmas
Carmack Avatar
December 21, 2014 at 12:13 PM
Congrats David.
Goff Avatar
December 14, 2014 at 12:53 AM
Cool city beat, David! Yes! I'm a Twin Cities boy! Lake Calhoun is my favorite walk in August! jimbo
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