Cinquain V


water
murmurs softly,
through the cool of exhaled
breath, against the stones it whispers,
secrets

secrets,
gently spoken,
lonely unbeckoned words, 
hidden deep within broken hearts,
aching

aching,
melting sorrow
pours viscous and endless,
caressing emotions that hide
within

within
this emptiness
sprouts the seed of desire,
where blooms love’s flower, bathed in sweet
water




04/01/2018

lonelinesssorrowcinquain

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Andreanna Escamilla

June 22, 2020 at 2:38 AM

Wow. Amazing. I like this form. This looks fun. I love your verses. It all comes full circle. Sometimes we need to empty ourselves to come whole. Like the the death of every winter, and birth of every spring.

James Inman

June 22, 2020 at 8:00 AM

Beautifully said Andi, a Cinquain can be written in two styles, classic which this one generally follows, and modern. Classic is 5 lines with specific syllable count per line, modern uses word count. This one is constructed with four Cinquain using the last word of the previous one to start the new one. Each one should be able to stand on its own as an independent poem and the first and last line should refer back to the title if there is one.

Juliet Ligon

April 28, 2018 at 2:26 PM

Creative form. Flows nicely, just like water.

James Inman

April 28, 2018 at 4:26 PM

Thank you for your nice comment Juliet.

Darlene De Beaulieu

April 26, 2018 at 2:05 PM

Hello ,James, I also read this poem as a love poem. i enjoyed this poem. Have a nice day my friend.

James Inman

April 27, 2018 at 8:41 PM

Love's amazing complex secrets Darlene, thank you.

Kelly Deschler

April 1, 2018 at 7:36 PM

So much emotion pours from every line ... We can all relate to such deep and powerful feelings, and you express them so well here ... Very nicely done, James!

James Inman

April 1, 2018 at 8:09 PM

Thank you again Kelly.