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Cinquain V

water murmurs softly, through the cool of exhaled breath, against the stones it whispers, secrets secrets, gently spoken, lonely unbeckoned words, hidden deep within broken hearts, aching aching, melting sorrow pours viscous and endless, caressing emotions that hide within within this emptiness sprouts the seed of desire, where blooms love’s flower, bathed in sweet water
04/01/2018

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Date: 6/22/2020 2:38:00 AM
Wow. Amazing. I like this form. This looks fun. I love your verses. It all comes full circle. Sometimes we need to empty ourselves to come whole. Like the the death of every winter, and birth of every spring.
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James Inman
Date: 6/22/2020 8:00:00 AM
Beautifully said Andi, a Cinquain can be written in two styles, classic which this one generally follows, and modern. Classic is 5 lines with specific syllable count per line, modern uses word count. This one is constructed with four Cinquain using the last word of the previous one to start the new one. Each one should be able to stand on its own as an independent poem and the the first and last line should refer back to the title if there is one.
Date: 4/28/2018 2:26:00 PM
Creative form. Flows nicely, just like water.
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James Inman
Date: 4/28/2018 4:26:00 PM
Thank you for your nice comment Juliet.
Date: 4/26/2018 2:05:00 PM
Hello ,James, I also read this poem as a love poem. i enjoyed this poem. Have a nice day my friend.
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James Inman
Date: 4/27/2018 8:41:00 PM
Love's amazing complex secrets Darlene, thank you.
Date: 4/1/2018 7:36:00 PM
So much emotion pours from every line ... We can all relate to such deep and powerful feelings, and you express them so well here ... Very nicely done, James!
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James Inman
Date: 4/1/2018 8:09:00 PM
Thank you again Kelly.
Date: 4/1/2018 7:09:00 AM
Beautiful poem - lovely execution, James.
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James Inman
Date: 4/1/2018 7:35:00 PM
Thank you for your kindness Line.