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cinereal

beneath a sullen moon
silence hovered
my mind meandered
the two soon
inextricably
entwined



AP: 3rd place 2025, Honorable Mention 2025

Submitted on January 10, 2025 to BRIAN STRAND'S contest 'A 2025 POSTED POEM' - RANKED 3RD

feelingsmoonsilencefree verse

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Sara Kendrick

January 12, 2025 at 7:10 AM

Congratulations on your winner. I got a chuckle about the silence and mind becoming intertwined. Way to go. Sara K

Line Gauthier

January 12, 2025 at 11:51 AM

Thanks, Sara ~ have a lovely day

JC Brul

January 12, 2025 at 1:16 AM

This is exquisitely beautiful! Brevity at its best. Congratulations, dear Line. Stay creative! ^___^ JCB

Line Gauthier

January 12, 2025 at 11:51 AM

Thank you very much, JCB ~

Ink Empress

January 11, 2025 at 11:47 AM

Dear line, love the picture youv used here, and also the softness of your words and how they flow is just so very beautiful and soulful. I love “ silence hovered” “ my mind meandered” the subtle flow of alliterations there is stunning! There is a pinch of melancholy in this that resonates. Congratulations on your win in brians contest. Sending you light always

Line Gauthier

January 11, 2025 at 4:27 PM

Most appreciated ~ thank you

Kim Rodrigues

January 10, 2025 at 3:06 PM

loneliness is an abyss…my friend at church cried…lost her husband a few years ago…said I feel so alone. Hugs of angels and the comfort of the Holy Spirit, prayed your way.

Line Gauthier

January 10, 2025 at 4:42 PM

Thanks for your lovely visit and comment, Kim.

Christine K Munsell

January 10, 2025 at 7:48 AM

Beautiful theme of oneness - in so few words. Very nice!

Line Gauthier

January 10, 2025 at 1:19 PM

most appreciated, thanks ~

Dean Wood

January 10, 2025 at 7:22 AM

Line, I really like this poem. It pulled me right in . Great imagery. It has the feel of a haiku or other Japanese form, few words but leaves you pondering, and reminiscing.

Line Gauthier

January 10, 2025 at 1:19 PM

thank you very much, Dean ~ most appreciated

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