Jack Horne Poet Tanka

Christmas Wishes

I see a wrapped gift
It is a china Santa
I’d wanted figures
Of the three ghosts of Christmas
Past, Present and Yet To Come 

I drop the figure
It smashes on the hearth stones
Then I spot a note 
And wondering what it says
I sweep the smashed china up

The note is from Claus
He says I should be careful
And look after things 
He says that I may receive
Dickensian  ghosts next year

Jack  Horne for Linda-Marie’s Santa's Surprise contest

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Gwendolen Song January 10, 2012 at 2:29 PM Jack..this one REALLY IS CREATIVE!! I like the topic you spun with your pen and what a great response from St. Nick! Congrats dear poet, on this esteemed win! GWEndolen

Carol Sunshine Brown January 10, 2012 at 5:09 AM Congratulations on you win in Linda-Marie's "Santa's Surprise contest Jack. Love, Carol

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl January 10, 2012 at 2:22 AM Well done, really nice Jack x

Bl Devnath January 9, 2012 at 10:45 PM Congratulation on your superb win, my friend. Loved it. bl

Jon Arno January 9, 2012 at 10:05 PM Congratulations on your great write. Best regards, Jon

Andrea Dietrich January 9, 2012 at 8:29 PM I'm very pleased to see this exceptionally written tanka scoring high on the list. WEll, deserved, my friend. Congrats.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart January 9, 2012 at 10:06 AM CONGRATS JACK ON SECOND PLACE WIN WITH THIS DELIGHTFUL ENTRY LUV..

Andrea Dietrich November 23, 2011 at 3:34 PM hahaha, this is a very SMART one, Jack. I enjoyed this.

Sara Kendrick November 23, 2011 at 3:34 PM Reads like a winner to me...I hope that you don't get Dickensian's ghost..Thanks for the kind reviews of my work..Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart November 21, 2011 at 7:59 PM thankxx for supporting my current contest Jack..good luck luv.. am sure will be amazed once again by your vibrant words...luv..

Carolyn Devonshire November 21, 2011 at 1:07 PM Oh no! Not "Dickensian ghosts"! Very intriguing write. I bet you DO have figurines of the three ghosts. Now this is quite a stern warning from Mr. Claus, so let's try to add some levity to the holiday! Bet wishes in the contest. Love, carolyn

Russell Sivey November 20, 2011 at 10:02 PM Great write here Jack!! This poem is quite enlightening! I like the fact you introduced the China doll into your poem! Some people don't know what it is! And they do break! Don't make Santa mad!! Awesome work!!

Tony Lane November 20, 2011 at 3:10 PM I like the twist Jack. Tony

Prince Ekpemandu November 20, 2011 at 1:01 PM nice one....very lovely