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Christmas Pantoum

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My Mate and I 
(in this case, the “I” is Santa Clause standing by his mate, the reindeer)

My mate and I – beneath a Christmas sky
Looking ever upward; I have to sigh
to see what is the heaven’s brightest star.
So close that star appears, and yet so far.

Looking ever upward, I have to sigh.
Why can’t the world know peace? I wonder why!
So close that star appears and yet so far.
Tranquilness envelops this place we are.

Why can’t the world know peace? I wonder why -
to see what is the heaven’s brightest star! 
Tranquilness envelops this place we are.
My mate and I – beneath a Christmas sky.

Jan. 20, 2020
for Eve Roper's Christmas Pantoum Rhyme Poetry Contest
Picture #3

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/21/2020 8:27:00 PM

It seems you have mastered the Pantoum. This is a fun one.

Joseph May

Date: 1/26/2020 5:54:00 PM

Congrats on your win Andrea..

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/26/2020 1:09:00 AM

Amen, Let there be peace in this world. There is enough chaos with the weather and earthquakes and fires. Congratulations on your second place win Andrea. xxoo

Eve Roper

Date: 1/25/2020 9:25:00 PM

Congratulations on your very well-deserved win, Andrea. I want to thank you for entering my contest.Your poem had great flow, perfect rhyme, and imagery. Hugs Eve

Ravindra K Kapoor

Date: 1/21/2020 10:41:00 PM

What a beautiful sketch you have painted while giving more depths to your thoughts and visions of peace with this beautiful painting of Christmas."Looking ever upward, I have to sigh. Why can’t the world know peace? I wonder why!"Beautiful and meaningful dear friend. With best wishes always...Ravindra

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 1/21/2020 9:06:00 PM

I do think the world "can know peace" - but I understand this poem also in full wiseness.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/21/2020 9:15:00 AM

So beautiful, Andrea! I’m looking up too! Stars are in my eyes!

John Watt

Date: 1/20/2020 11:59:00 PM

Brilliant pantoum, Andrea. I agree with your other readers that you make this form seem easy and flow so smoothly. Connecting the bright star to peace on earth warms my heart. ~ J

Sandra Adams

Date: 1/20/2020 7:36:00 PM

love the way you crafted this one... you always rock at these type of forms...i am sure this one will place high in the contest... wonderful write my friend... creative!!! hugs

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 1/20/2020 5:51:00 PM

Hello Andrea, yes i agree the world should know peaceand not just for one day. haave a nice evening my friend.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/20/2020 5:27:00 PM

Your pantoum flows well Andrea and the lines wrap around in stanzas meaningfully. A sure win for you.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 1/20/2020 3:58:00 PM

A lovely description of the picture, Andrea. Really like the way your poem is written in the voice of a reindeer. Clever! Best wishes in the contest, Carolyn