Andrea Dietrich Poet Pantoum

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Christmas Pantoum

My Mate and I 
(in this case, the “I” is Santa Clause standing by his mate, the reindeer)

My mate and I – beneath a Christmas sky
Looking ever upward; I have to sigh
to see what is the heaven’s brightest star.
So close that star appears, and yet so far.

Looking ever upward, I have to sigh.
Why can’t the world know peace? I wonder why!
So close that star appears and yet so far.
Tranquilness envelops this place we are.

Why can’t the world know peace? I wonder why -
to see what is the heaven’s brightest star! 
Tranquilness envelops this place we are.
My mate and I – beneath a Christmas sky.

Jan. 20, 2020
for Eve Roper's Christmas Pantoum Rhyme Poetry Contest
Picture #3

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Richard Lamoureux March 21, 2020 at 8:27 PM It seems you have mastered the Pantoum. This is a fun one.

Joseph May January 26, 2020 at 5:54 PM Congrats on your win Andrea..

Connie Marcum Wong January 26, 2020 at 1:09 AM Amen, Let there be peace in this world. There is enough chaos with the weather and earthquakes and fires. Congratulations on your second place win Andrea. xxoo

Eve Roper January 25, 2020 at 9:25 PM Congratulations on your very well-deserved win, Andrea. I want to thank you for entering my contest.Your poem had great flow, perfect rhyme, and imagery. Hugs Eve

Ravindra K Kapoor January 21, 2020 at 10:41 PM What a beautiful sketch you have painted while giving more depths to your thoughts and visions of peace with this beautiful painting of Christmas."Looking ever upward, I have to sigh. Why can’t the world know peace? I wonder why!"Beautiful and meaningful dear friend. With best wishes always...Ravindra

Caren Krutsinger January 21, 2020 at 9:06 PM I do think the world "can know peace" - but I understand this poem also in full wiseness.

Kim Rodrigues January 21, 2020 at 9:15 AM So beautiful, Andrea! I’m looking up too! Stars are in my eyes!

John Watt January 20, 2020 at 11:59 PM Brilliant pantoum, Andrea. I agree with your other readers that you make this form seem easy and flow so smoothly. Connecting the bright star to peace on earth warms my heart. ~ J

Sandra Adams January 20, 2020 at 7:36 PM love the way you crafted this one... you always rock at these type of forms...i am sure this one will place high in the contest... wonderful write my friend... creative!!! hugs

Darlene De Beaulieu January 20, 2020 at 5:51 PM Hello Andrea, yes i agree the world should know peaceand not just for one day. haave a nice evening my friend.

Vijay Pandit January 20, 2020 at 5:27 PM Your pantoum flows well Andrea and the lines wrap around in stanzas meaningfully. A sure win for you.

Carolyn Devonshire January 20, 2020 at 3:58 PM A lovely description of the picture, Andrea. Really like the way your poem is written in the voice of a reindeer. Clever! Best wishes in the contest, Carolyn

Jan Allison January 20, 2020 at 3:05 PM what a charming poem Andrea a lovely interpretation of the image:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham January 20, 2020 at 2:46 PM Brilliant Andrea, you make this form look easy. Good luck. Tom