Chill of Winter

The winter crawls upon,
the tuft of wet grass,
wet from the morning dew
As the chill of winter, shivers down,
the coarse chest of tress
Soon rodents shovel holes,
In search of warmth
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Sambourne Avatar
March 31, 2024 at 8:30 PM
Grand images, Arastu, on the cold creep of winter. One suggestion, however, is to remove all the commas and let your fine free verse flow uninterrupted by pauses. Best wishes, Brian
Goyal Avatar
April 9, 2024 at 9:03 PM
I see, I do tend to use a lot of punctuations. Thank you for the feedback, I will look into this for my future writes.
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