Home » Poems » Daver Austin » Child's View

Child's View

CHILD’S VIEW

Look!
Old folks
Funny skin
All wrinkled up
Nearly bent double
It must hurt when they smile
And their clothes are funny too
I wish they wouldn’t block the aisle
The supermarket is full of them
Mamma    make those old folks go away

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Ann Roske

Date: 5/24/2012 9:29:00 AM

I LOVE THIS - sounds like a mid trip to Safeway =)

Cindy Lu

Date: 5/15/2012 10:14:00 AM

haha nice one! Cindy You ever almost get run over by granny on her motorized cart in Wally world, WATCH OUT!!!clean up in isle 4, perhaps a paramedic as well.... JK.

Daver Austin
Date: 5/15/2012 10:38:00 AM

Cindy Lu - a woman after my own heart. Down with old people, all except myself, of course. daver

Cindy Lu

Date: 5/15/2012 10:14:00 AM

haha nice one! Cindy You ever almost get run over by granny on her motorized cart in Wally world, WATCH OUT!!!clean up in isle 4, perhaps a paramedic as well.... JK.

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 5/14/2012 8:04:00 PM

Are you going through your second childhood Daver? If so, you need a spanking telling those "old folks" to go away. We are the salt of the earth as I see it anyhow! :)

Daver Austin
Date: 5/15/2012 10:03:00 AM

Being very ancient, I can get away with it. LOve, daver

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 5/14/2012 10:31:00 AM

Ain't it the truth! So well composed... and you even managed a rhyme! BRAVO, my friend!! Best wishes, Keith

Prince Ekpemandu

Date: 5/14/2012 7:50:00 AM

very nice and funny.....i like it

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 5/13/2012 12:10:00 AM

Beautiful poem here - I really enjoyed this unique piece. Wow! That's really cool. Pikes Peak seems like an interesting place. I have never been there myself, but I want to go to Colorado Springs some day. The book takes place in the future and they built an awesome observatory. I thought Pikes Peak would be a nice place to study stars and such. Always, Laura

Kathryn Collins

Date: 5/12/2012 3:30:00 PM

Very close.... It's a whistling tea kettle.

Kathryn Collins

Date: 5/12/2012 7:09:00 AM

Let us stay!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/11/2012 9:01:00 PM

hahaha. This is so cute. I really like it, Daver! hope you had a nice Friday like i did.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/11/2012 12:39:00 PM

Smile........well said of this child !Love it...lol..so good.- Have a lovely weekend! (my last poem,is from child`s mouth to - "God has taken everything") - oxox love Anne-Lise

Michelle Mac Donald

Date: 5/11/2012 12:35:00 PM

It would be terribly sad Daver, if all children thought like this. The very young don't, it's as if they haven't been away long from where'd they'd come, They don't see wrinkles but something else that is more beautiful, of which they are too young to describe. All I know for sure, is that you're the bestest guru muse, I could ever want!:) You're a sweetheart, Daver!! Love, Mikki