Black Eyed Susan Poet Rhyme

Cheers

I finally understand dry mouth
Now that I’m running a race
Like a dog with its tongue hanging out
I’m panting to keep the pace

I feel like a Black-eyed Susan,
Wilting and bowed in a drought
I think I’m suffering from delusions -
I just saw Elvis in a cloud!

It doesn’t sound too strange, I know
But I swear he was cheering for me
Rocking his pelvis to and fro,
Screaming to take the lead

I run into hands pushing H2O
And chug the water like shots
The icy cold refreshment flows
Into me, clearing  eye spots

I throw down the empty water cups
And now see Elvis crystal clear
Only it’s not Elvis; it’s me mum,
Drunk and flashing her rear!

I ignore me mum and the jeers
As I speed through the finish line
Then join the others with a “cheers”
An H20 high five! 


9/27/11

Received 10th place in "Flowing Water" contest

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Carol Sunshine Brown October 3, 2011 at 8:37 AM Congratulations on your win in the "Flowing Water" contest Susan. Love, Carol

Dinda Minardi October 1, 2011 at 9:47 AM This is interesting write, Susan... I enjoyed it so much :)

Zzzzz Zzzzz October 1, 2011 at 6:37 AM A fun write, with some entertaining imagery! Cheers and high-fives all round! xoxo Robert.

Lee Ramage October 1, 2011 at 1:50 AM Just love this poem, I feel this way everytime I walk on the treadmill. So well done!!! Love Lee

Bob Quigley October 1, 2011 at 12:32 AM Congratulations on your win Susan

Kim Merryman September 30, 2011 at 11:58 PM Congrats on your 10th place win, Susan! Kim

Linda-Marie Sweetheart September 30, 2011 at 11:11 PM Congrats Susan on sweet success in flowing waters contest with lovely creative lines luv..

Francine Roberts September 30, 2011 at 11:07 PM congrats Susan on your 10th place win in the contest, I think this was the only humorous entry, nicely done

Linda-Marie Sweetheart September 28, 2011 at 11:17 AM an amazing write Susan.. so full of energy electrifying the screen when read ..luv those last two verses.. witty and wonderful luv..

Andrea Dietrich September 27, 2011 at 11:09 PM oh, and was this something you actually did recently?? I remember back in '83 when I was still a young mom. I ran in a ten kilo race. I only practiced for it a few weeks before the run and I came in about in the middle of all the runners who participated in that race during Provo's big parade and Independence day celebration.

Andrea Dietrich September 27, 2011 at 11:07 PM I agree with John smith down here. And how do you get Elvis from seeing your mum's rear? hahaha. maybe from his bad days when he got all swollen and fat? heehee. This poem was great fun and some of the lines made me chuckle! Was it for any contest, sweetie?

John Smith September 27, 2011 at 10:47 PM Your mum's rear and Elvis! What a great image. It's remarkable you finished the race. Great poem.