Paul Callus Poet Haiku

Charlieku

Charlieku (var of 2-3-4)

engraved		        bubbling		      hark! the tinkling	
on hard rock		with happiness		   laughter
a pact of love		wild daisies	         of bluebells

blooming		        the joy			   begonia
with rising sun		of giving		      sweet promises
chicory			no bartering		   at stake

meditation		        like a crocus		   her words 
in the woods		open up		        a fleeting touch  
silence			to warmth		        of warm breeze 

justice-			frothy		        bridge crossing
truth is not		        indulgence		       the stream and I
exchangeable		morning pleasure	    skipping		

a free deal 		riding waves		     soulful
at the grocer’s-		living			             clarity
gossip			for the moment	        chickadee’s song


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A Charlieku 4-3-2 Contest
Hosted by Charles Messina
Placed 2nd
© 15th October 2018

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Constance La France December 13, 2018 at 7:51 AM Paul, congratulations on your great placement with these creative Ku's, well done ! Paul Callus December 13, 2018 at 10:03 AM Glad you enjoyed them, Constance;;;thank you! Regards // paul

Jack Horne November 16, 2018 at 1:18 PM love these - especially love the gossipy grocer! Paul Callus November 16, 2018 at 2:45 PM Pleased you did, Jack! Have a nice weekend, my friend. // paul

Carolyn Devonshire October 24, 2018 at 8:17 AM Back to say congratulations, Paul! Loved all of your Charlieku. Hugs, Carolyn Paul Callus October 24, 2018 at 9:40 AM Thank you, Carolyn...you're always so good to me:) Hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich October 23, 2018 at 11:44 PM yayyy my third time here but this time to say. congratulations Paul Callus October 24, 2018 at 9:38 AM Thank you, Andrea:) I'll keep the kettle on the fire, just in case...:) Regards // paul

Jan Allison October 23, 2018 at 3:07 PM an exceptional string of poems Paul and I love the way you formatted them threy flow so beautifully together:-) Many congratulations on your win:-) hugs Jan xx Paul Callus October 24, 2018 at 9:36 AM Thank you, Jan:) I'm still trying to make out what this form is after! Most of the winning entries have nothing to do with haiku, so..... Hugs // paul

Tom Cunningham October 23, 2018 at 10:50 AM Wow, when I first saw these I struggled to see them, then I looked at my phone horizontly and bingo there they were. I'll remember to do that next time. Wonderful string Paul, congrats. Tom Paul Callus October 23, 2018 at 11:03 AM Same thing happened to me when I used my g'daughter's tablet! I'd rather use my p.c. Thank you for persevering and reading:) Regards // paul

Line Gauthier October 23, 2018 at 10:19 AM Lovely, Paul. Congrats on your top win. Paul Callus October 23, 2018 at 10:24 AM Thank you, Line. Best regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen October 23, 2018 at 2:26 AM - Congratulations on your great Charlieku, Paul :) - Have a nice Tuesday :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Paul Callus October 23, 2018 at 3:13 AM Your congrats are appreciated, Anne-Lise:) May you too have a lovely day! Hugs // paul

Connie Marcum Wong October 23, 2018 at 1:59 AM This is spectacular Paul! Love the format. Congratulations on your deserving win! Paul Callus October 23, 2018 at 3:09 AM Thank you on all counts, Connie! Have a lovely day:) Regards // paul

Charles Messina October 22, 2018 at 11:23 PM Wow, Paul. You have mastered this form. Excellent job on these ku's. Congratulations on your well deserved win...All the best, Charlie Paul Callus October 23, 2018 at 2:58 AM Thank you, Charles. I have done my best to give sense to the 'ku' at the end of the form's name! Otherwise, just writing a sentence and breaking it into 3 lines would be meaningless. Regards // paul

Vladislav Raven October 20, 2018 at 8:36 AM Hi Paul, this is an excellent group of Charlieku and I love the style you have used in placing them before us. This reads like a winner to me Paul. So creative in content and style. This one has to be a fave Paul. Good luck in the contest. Have a wonderful weekend. Your friend always....Mike. Paul Callus October 20, 2018 at 9:35 AM Your complimentary remarks and the fav are much appreciated, my friend....thank you! Enjoy the weekend. // paul

Heidi Sands October 19, 2018 at 5:41 PM This is amazing! These are great Paul. I enjoyed this very much :) Paul Callus October 20, 2018 at 9:32 AM I love your reaction, Heidi...thank you! Best regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich October 18, 2018 at 6:37 PM I did not give up!! took me half an hour though. Paul Callus October 19, 2018 at 1:05 PM :)) I had no doubt that you would not surrender that easily, Andrea:) Now let me go check out your work! Regards // paul

Susan Ashley October 18, 2018 at 7:00 AM Your prolific and artistic pen strikes with precision and perfection with amazing substance and imagery in this lustrous strand of charlieku, Paul. Beautiful and creative, one and all. Best wishes for a win! Warmest wishes and hugs my amazing friend.. ~Susan Paul Callus October 18, 2018 at 8:56 AM Thank you very much, dear Susan. I know you read deep between the lines; thus your comments are doubly appreciated. ~ Warm regards & Hugs my friend. // paul

Andrea Dietrich October 17, 2018 at 3:31 PM Hey, I came to tell you. I borrowed your formatting style but when I tried to bring my 25 charliku from my files to soup, it did not "translate" and the lines were all messed up. I need to get home from work and try to figure out how to put my poems in columns right at soup's box. It will probably take 20 min. uggg. what a pain. but the presentation of a lot of them is so much better in this box style. Paul Callus October 17, 2018 at 4:05 PM Sorry about that, Andrea! It takes a bit of playing around. First I did it all on a word file, copied it and pasted it @ Soup submission. It still needed slight arrangements because of spacing. Don't give up:) Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen October 17, 2018 at 8:06 AM - I do not want to choose one or two ... I choose everyone :) - Luck in the contest, Paul :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Paul Callus October 17, 2018 at 9:43 AM You are very diplomatic, Anne-Lise:)) Thank you for the total choice:) Hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich October 16, 2018 at 5:27 PM these are wonderful. I particularly enjoyed the images presented in the third column of charlieque. bluebells was my favorite. Paul Callus October 17, 2018 at 3:05 AM Thank you, Andrea. I love these shorties; I usually use them later on as a basis for longer poems. Regards // paul

Nette Onclaud October 16, 2018 at 4:16 PM ohh paul... very creative and filled with substance.. winner for sure!...huggs Paul Callus October 16, 2018 at 4:25 PM Thank you for reading and liking, Nette...and for the faith you have in them:) Hugs // paul

Gershon Wolf October 16, 2018 at 3:43 PM Such an innovative creation, this! Should do great in the contest. ~ Gershon Paul Callus October 16, 2018 at 3:48 PM I rely on you knowledgeable opinion, Gershon...thank you! Regards // paul

Mystic Rose Rose October 16, 2018 at 1:07 PM Oh my, I feasted my eyes on each set, you seem to have done this right, thanks for sharing, gl in the contest Paul Paul Callus October 16, 2018 at 3:46 PM I'm so glad you enjoyed this string of 'ku', Pixie; thank you. Regards // paul

Constance La France October 16, 2018 at 12:57 PM Paul, wow how creative and contemporary Paul Callus October 16, 2018 at 3:45 PM I love your reaction, Constance:) Thank you! Regards // paul

Afolabi Muideen October 16, 2018 at 12:31 AM This is really intriguing, thanks for sharing! Paul Callus October 16, 2018 at 3:43 PM Pleased you found it intriguing, Afolabi...thank you. Regards // paul

Agnes Krampe October 15, 2018 at 6:14 PM I am trying to figure out if they are meant to stand alone or if they are combined, and if so, in which order to read, first down or first across - anything is possible, I love how you leave this open. Paul Callus October 16, 2018 at 3:42 PM They are meant to stand alone, Agnes. The physicist is for ever wanting to find solutions:) Thank you for your deep interest. Regards // paul

Vijay Pandit October 15, 2018 at 5:54 PM Amazing how you wrote this Paul..a talented poet you are. Each one unique..together they are so much more! A sure win!! Paul Callus October 16, 2018 at 3:40 PM Thank you for the complimentary comments, Vijay! Your encouragement is valued. Regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire October 15, 2018 at 4:52 PM Wow, so many wonderful Charlieku, Paul! I love them all. My fave is the one about "justice." Best wishes in the contest! Hugs, Carolyn Paul Callus October 16, 2018 at 12:19 PM Thank you, Carolyn; my pen got carried away! In the end I saved half of them for future use. Hugs // paul