Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Poet Villanelle

Notes About The Poem

I first write with PAUL CALLUS. He is one among the best poets and my friends here.. :) 

I shall never forget how it all began to us.. :) LOVER AND FRIEND was our first poem together.We cram for some hours to enter it on a contest with a form we both aren't familiar with Rondeau Redouble. Our entry ended Honourable Mention for the first contest we enter it but I wasn't satisfied for I know it's more than that... :) 

He is among my critics: a good one. We share some views and opinions in a very diplomatic and friendly way. I treasure the friendship that bloomed with the lines. I am so touched by him that I made some poems with the our friendship in my mind. though at times I consider him a big brother. teacher, too.. :)!

 

Chariot of Fire - a Collab With P Callus

CHARIOT OF FIRE

I stand in silence and behold the sight, 
staring in wonder, waiting for thunder. 
A chariot of fire travels through the night. 

The white-winged horses gallop in full flight 
pulling at the reins; flowing are their manes 
I stand in silence and behold the sight. 

Where are they going? There’s a shining light 
leading all the way, so they will not stray. 
A chariot of fire travels through the night 

amidst the heaven where in pure delight 
resides the Master, the sweetest lover, 
I stand in silence and behold the sight; 

Blessings whisked to amble slowly with plight; 
heartbeats race to sway, courage on display. 
A chariot of fire travels through the night 

armoured by God’s spirit. They ride like knights 
fearless from pain; victory, their peak gain. 
I stand in silence and behold the sight; 
a chariot of fire travels through the night. 


©O.E.Guillermo and P.Callus
Written last 5:07 pm, November 17, 2014

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Poet Destroyer A January 30, 2016 at 5:31 PM Olive, Dropped by to say hi and congratulate you on having your poem selected by Soup's Administration. This is a wonderful poem to have featured on the homepage. Always & Forever! LINDA

Arthur Vaso November 25, 2014 at 6:38 PM Wow WOw WOW, what an epic, majestic and beautiful poem, well done the both you!!!! Loved this one A7 Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser November 26, 2014 at 8:01 AM thanks much Buddy Arthur.. :) hugs.. :D!

Tim Smith November 23, 2014 at 5:56 AM Very well done my two good friends..I love the flow and rhyme Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser November 24, 2014 at 5:32 AM thanks much Tim:) appteciate it.. ;)

Paul Callus November 20, 2014 at 2:03 PM Hi Olive_eloi! I came back for another look and noticed the Poet's Notes at the top. Thank you for the lovely comments you pass about me. You know what I think of you, and when I act as a teacher I am never too hard on you:) I am honoured that you look at me as a big brother (not Orwellian); you know I'm always there when the need arises:)) hugs // paul Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser November 20, 2014 at 3:51 PM i know Paul that you will not turn that hard to me...:) you suggest and tell your opinion but you leave it to me the decision.. :) Yes, thank you for just everything... :)! God bless you always and huuuuggs.. :)!

Martin Lochner November 20, 2014 at 2:20 AM amazing poem and it gave me wings to fly! Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser November 20, 2014 at 7:36 AM thanks much.. :)!

Brenda Meier-Hans November 19, 2014 at 7:16 PM The two of you have done a wonderful job on this amazing poem Olive. The two of you are among my favourite poets here also. Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser November 20, 2014 at 7:33 AM thanks much Brenda.. :)! GOd bless us all.. :D

Jan Allison November 19, 2014 at 7:16 PM Its a gem of a poem Olive and Paul - Olive I have had the pleasure of meeting Paul and his family - he is the most wonderful person and has become a cherished friend... hugs Jan xxx Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser November 20, 2014 at 7:36 AM :) wow... :) I know he is.. :)! thanks much Jan.. :)!

Casarah Nance November 19, 2014 at 5:36 PM Wonderful, the two of you are amazing seperate and amazing together, Bravo. and tons of hugs xxx Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser November 20, 2014 at 7:30 AM Thanks Cassie.. :) thank you for your visit.. :)

David Meade November 19, 2014 at 4:53 PM powerful and delightful -- I can feel the intensity and strength and draw great comfort from the pounding of the hoofs and the Spirit rider. What a team!! Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser November 20, 2014 at 5:36 AM thanks much David.. :) I am glad you like this as I do :)

James Fraser November 19, 2014 at 4:42 PM Wonderful image of a 'Chariot of Fire' travelling through the night. If one was able to view such, one would be in awe. Well done Olive & Paul. To my fav's this gem goes, James :):) Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser November 20, 2014 at 5:29 AM thanks you Mr. James.. :) making this ine if your faves is a wow.. :D/ Paul Callus November 19, 2014 at 5:32 PM Thank you James for the lovely comments....and even more so for the fav! // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser November 19, 2014 at 4:37 PM Paul! PAul! PAuuuuul, what I can say for this second write we have, at first I really don't how I'll do this regarding the theme of course not with the form as I done it before.. :) the more I was challenged when you incorporated internal rhymes and the syllable count.. :) But thanks for choosing this topic. :) I like the story behind this title both on real life as in one movie with same title and the story in the BIble.. I like the message.. :) No whippings this time like our first poem! :D! Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser November 19, 2014 at 7:31 PM hahahahha Paul... :D! well. I told you yesterday.. :D! well, you know me well I can't say NO to a challenge if it I was jailed by interest.. :) And the title you chose immediately caught me.. :) And the more I read on it's background the more I am inspired.. :)! no worries for the added challenge :D! I know there are no internal rhymes but well, we did it with a twist which makes it more! :D hahahahahha :D! hugs too, OLive ELoisa.. :D a Paul Callus November 19, 2014 at 5:29 PM Dear Olive_eloi!:) I just heard you calling and came in haste before night turns to day! I know I was hard on you; a Villanelle does not require internal rhyme, but I thought that would make it more challenging (one line in each stanza). Still, you stood your ground and did not run away! No whips this time:)) Writing with you has been fun...could not be otherwise!!:) hugs // paul