Rita A. Simmonds Poet Tanka

Chained Dog Song

Jack Russell sings sharp—
two barks for each passing bike
he would love to chase.
Droning wheels tease and roll on
from chained dog’s staccato song.

May 24, 2016
Traditional Tanka Contest

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Paul Callus June 24, 2016 at 3:01 PM A traditional tanka with a modern theme. Both droning wheels and staccato combine to produce a rap song. ~ Congrats on your podium finish, Rita! // paul

Sandra Haight June 18, 2016 at 7:30 PM They make a good symphony, Rita. I could identify with this since our daughter and family have a Jack Russell...barks at everything! Congratulations on your fine placement in the contest. Nicely done. Hugs, Sandra Rita A. Simmonds June 21, 2016 at 6:15 PM Thank you, Sandra!

Charlotte Puddifoot June 18, 2016 at 4:30 PM this one stuck in my mind from the first reading; i thought it was quirky, unusual, well written, with that "staccato song" a strong, alliterative closure - congrats on your win in my contest Rita A. Simmonds June 21, 2016 at 6:16 PM Thank you, Charlotte. It's a great honor!

Jan Allison June 18, 2016 at 4:20 PM Very cleverly penned Rita congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx Rita A. Simmonds June 21, 2016 at 6:16 PM Thanks, Jan!

Bonnie Jennings May 24, 2016 at 8:39 PM This is so clever. And ~ to add, it is about our furry friends... Wonderful Tanka Rita A. Simmonds May 27, 2016 at 8:40 AM thank you!

Casarah Nance May 24, 2016 at 4:15 PM I can see and hear this orchestra! I like this, nicely done! Rita A. Simmonds May 27, 2016 at 8:41 AM Thank you!