Causality

What is this void you try to fill, A void empty yet stuffed with society's swill, Stark emotions driven by dopamine, Scrounging for joy on a subconscious mezzanine, Started all by a demented serpent's lie, If you eat it's fruit, you will not die, Followed by a sin that affected all humanity, Which even caused this void of insanity.

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Alesia Leach

Date: 3/5/2025 9:21:00 AM

Your poem Causality has a strong, thought-provoking rhythm and a deep philosophical weight. The imagery of an "empty yet stuffed" void is striking, capturing the paradox of modern existence--people seeking fulfillment in artificial means, yet remaining unsatisfied. The reference to dopamine and subconscious levels adds a psychological layer, while the biblical allusion to the serpent's lie ties it all back to the idea of original sin and human downfall.

Garrett Bass
Date: 3/5/2025 3:13:00 PM

Your analysis is so striking again! You knew again exactly what I was aiming for! Thank you for your attention to this poem. Again I really appreciate it coming from such a great poet as yourself!