JC Brul Poet Free verse

Castles

How many sands have you counted
building castles near the shoreline
which the sea washes away
before the day is done?

Alas, you build them 
again and again
unmindful of the winds
raging around you:
The waves roaring over the sands
blasting away your dream castles

Before your hands could shape
the towers in your mind;
as if there were no winds 
and rushing waves that blast
your hopes away, poor man.


BRIAN'S SELECT 4,any form,any theme
Contest Judged:  6/5/2020 12:19:00 AM
Sponsored by: Brian Strand
Hon. Mention

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Andrea Dietrich July 2, 2025 at 2:52 PM Soupmail

JC Brul July 2, 2025 at 2:50 AM I mistakenly entered this for Brian's 1393 instead of my Castle Hiku...my vision is causing me trouble these days. -____-

Andrea Dietrich October 15, 2020 at 6:18 PM You are such a good poet. At last I clicked down here on one I had not yet seen. BTW, in line 6 a typo!

Richard Lamoureux April 15, 2020 at 9:33 AM I see you are also drawn to the ocean.

Paul Callus April 14, 2020 at 12:24 PM Metaphorically beautiful and meaningful, JCB! We often dream and build castles in the air, and though several might be 'washed' away, others become reality! a fav ~ Regards // paul

Kim Rodrigues April 10, 2020 at 10:40 AM A fave! You are so worth reading! JC Brul April 11, 2020 at 2:24 AM You are an inspiration dear poet Kim. I am looking forward to read more of your gems.

Caren Krutsinger April 10, 2020 at 10:15 AM "Alas, you build them again ad again unmindful of the winds" - this is the epitome of optimism; resilient people understand how to do this. JC Brul April 11, 2020 at 2:26 AM yes, dear poet Caren...perseverance amidst trials. Thank you.