B. Maxine Revolution Poet Rhyme

Castle Contest

Im in a crystal castle
the diamondesque walls retreats my hassles
A picture dances on the mantle
Looking upon a throne of depth and desire
glassy walls reflect the fire
im dwelling in a kingdom of flames
Face painted by ranks and shame
how did I obtain such a smiled at fame 
could it be the bloodline of my name?
From the land in which I came?
This place is such a scary shape
secret passages 
secret messages
high ceilings
silk drapes.
I elate around the ball room
I create the beautiful faces bloom
but I must go and go home to my doom
for I cannot forever stay in this place and pester
for I am not royalty at all..

but merely the jester.

B. Maxine
1/25/14

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Richard Lamoureux February 4, 2014 at 7:18 PM A fine piece, congrats.

Abdulhafeez Oyewole February 4, 2014 at 11:39 AM Congrats on your fine win.

Dr.Ram Mehta February 4, 2014 at 6:16 AM Enjoyed your write on castle and congrats on the win, Maxine

Shadow Hamilton February 4, 2014 at 12:01 AM I love the ending Maxine super poem congrats on placing ty for entering Shadow x smile hug

Mohammad Abedin February 2, 2014 at 10:20 AM I enjoyed it

Cathy Moore February 1, 2014 at 8:10 PM Good read

Robert Pettit January 29, 2014 at 7:04 PM You also have an extra "not" in your line that is third from the bottom. It is really not needed. It is between "cannot" and "forever". Still, this was an interesting write. B. Maxine Revolution January 29, 2014 at 8:20 PM Thank you.

Scott Thirtyseven January 29, 2014 at 2:54 AM Nice ending, A nice little twist. you've got two 'the's in line 5. B. Maxine Revolution January 29, 2014 at 12:44 PM Thank you very much!! I didnt notice it. :)

Poet Tacito January 28, 2014 at 7:41 PM I didn't expect this ending. This was quite the ride. The faces around us and how we see them, compared to how they really are. Perception speaks volumes, for better or worse. Nice to meet you, Britney! Great job! B. Maxine Revolution January 29, 2014 at 12:45 PM Agreed ! Thanks for reading glad you enjoyed it. Nice to meet you as well :)

Anne-Lise Andresen January 28, 2014 at 6:31 PM - Nice to read your great poem Britney. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)