Castle Contest

Im in a crystal castle
the diamondesque walls retreats my hassles
A picture dances on the mantle
Looking upon a throne of depth and desire
glassy walls reflect the fire
im dwelling in a kingdom of flames
Face painted by ranks and shame
how did I obtain such a smiled at fame 
could it be the bloodline of my name?
From the land in which I came?
This place is such a scary shape
secret passages 
secret messages
high ceilings
silk drapes.
I elate around the ball room
I create the beautiful faces bloom
but I must go and go home to my doom
for I cannot forever stay in this place and pester
for I am not royalty at all..

but merely the jester.

B. Maxine
1/25/14

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 2/4/2014 7:18:00 PM
A fine piece, congrats.
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Date: 2/4/2014 11:39:00 AM
Congrats on your fine win.
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Date: 2/4/2014 6:16:00 AM
Enjoyed your write on castle and congrats on the win, Maxine
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Date: 2/4/2014 12:01:00 AM
I love the ending Maxine super poem congrats on placing ty for entering Shadow x smile hug
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Date: 2/2/2014 10:20:00 AM
I enjoyed it
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Date: 2/1/2014 8:10:00 PM
Good read
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Date: 1/29/2014 7:04:00 PM
You also have an extra "not" in your line that is third from the bottom. It is really not needed. It is between "cannot" and "forever". Still, this was an interesting write.
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B. Maxine Revolution
Date: 1/29/2014 8:20:00 PM
Thank you.
Date: 1/29/2014 2:54:00 AM
Nice ending, A nice little twist. you've got two 'the's in line 5.
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B. Maxine Revolution
Date: 1/29/2014 12:44:00 PM
Thank you very much!! I didnt notice it. :)
Date: 1/28/2014 7:41:00 PM
I didn't expect this ending. This was quite the ride. The faces around us and how we see them, compared to how they really are. Perception speaks volumes, for better or worse. Nice to meet you, Britney! Great job!
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B. Maxine Revolution
Date: 1/29/2014 12:45:00 PM
Agreed ! Thanks for reading glad you enjoyed it. Nice to meet you as well :)
Date: 1/28/2014 6:31:00 PM
- Nice to read your great poem Britney. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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