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Caribe Canticle

Warm, blue, Islands in The Stream

     Immersed in your sweet bosom

 I drift, slow, to your cool depths

Shimmering coral towers ...

 Surround me like Heaven's spires

     I reach for ropes of sunlight ...

          And swallow my last ... wet ... breath.





~ 2nd Place ~  in the "Sevenbits" Poetry Contest, Nette Onclaud, Judge & Sponsor. ( Islands in The Stream = Caribbean Isles )

~ 10th Place ~  in the "An October Premiere Contest" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Judge & Sponsor.

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Darlene De Beaulieu Date: 10/9/2017 8:28:00 AM It sounds to me , that you went for a swim. I like the water,I like the sounds of the waves,so relaxing. have a nice day my friend. Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 10/9/2017 8:31:00 PM Yes - "The Big Swim", as it were, lol ... I lived in St Croix and did a lot of snorkeling and scuba, (almost every day after work), though this one is actually about drowning, I lent my experience to it. I have always felt I would die by drowning - even had dreams about it - so that's where this is going, though not in a scary or bad way, but rather resigned to it. Thank you so much for your comments! :-)

Andrea Dietrich Date: 10/8/2017 8:36:00 PM wow, best one I have seen dealing with nature. I LOVE this, Gregory!!! Congrats on a great win. Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 10/9/2017 12:38:00 AM Thank you so much, Andrea, I so greatly appreciate the kind comments! <3

Darren White Date: 10/8/2017 9:52:00 AM Beautiful Greg :) Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 10/8/2017 3:44:00 PM Thank you, Buddy - much appreciated! :-)

Subimal Sinha-Roy Date: 10/8/2017 1:59:00 AM Congratulations, Greg on your fine win. Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 10/8/2017 2:43:00 AM Thank you, Subimal ... much appreciated.

Eve Roper Date: 10/7/2017 8:06:00 PM Congratulations on your win, Gregory, wow! love the last line.. Hugs Eve ~`* Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 10/7/2017 8:17:00 PM Thank you so very kindly, Eve, that's very sweet of you - I m so pleased you liked my little poem! Blessings, my friend! :-) <3

Constance La France Date: 10/7/2017 4:46:00 PM Greg , CONGRATULATIONS on your placement with Nette, too! Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 10/7/2017 6:09:00 PM Thank you very much, BW - very thankful to garner a second with this one! Blessings, Friend! :-)

Nette Onclaud Date: 10/7/2017 3:59:00 PM your opposing images made a strong statement in the end... sweet congrats, greg...i hope this was done for my challenge first before entering it in another contest... huggs Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 10/7/2017 6:08:00 PM Thank you SO much, Nette, I am truly honored - and yes, it WAS, (hence the title), entering the other contest was a last-minute thing, and I wrote this specifically for your contest. Blessings, my friend! :-)

Constance La France Date: 10/6/2017 7:16:00 PM Greg, congratulations on your win with Brian, a beautiful write ! Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 10/6/2017 7:25:00 PM Thank you very much, BW ... much appreciated!

Gary Smith Date: 10/6/2017 1:02:00 AM Congrats Gregory, a lovely write :) Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 10/6/2017 7:32:00 AM Thank you so much, Gary - much appreciated! :-)

Russell Sivey Date: 10/4/2017 6:22:00 AM What beauty you write with my friend! It's like you took nature's living pen and wrote with the ink of the Caribbean to form the greatest poem possible! I think your piece will surely receive high marks, especially with your selection of subject! Great Work!! Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 10/4/2017 11:25:00 PM Thank you so much, Russell, that means a great deal to me - so pleased you enjoyed this, my friend! :-)

Kim Rodrigues Date: 10/3/2017 8:41:00 AM Nicely done! Login to Reply Gregory Richard Barden Date: 10/4/2017 11:25:00 PM Thank you, Kim!

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 10/3/2017 7:51:00 AM A little bit la petite mort :) Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 10/3/2017 9:01:00 AM Ah, reconfirming my double entendre ;) Gregory Richard Barden Date: 10/3/2017 8:09:00 AM Indeed, Maureen! This actually comes from a very real nightmare I had once, (in the throes of my substance abuse), where I experienced many different types of death - pain and all - and drowning, strangely, was one of the least terrifying. I have always felt completely at home in the water, (and underwater), so it makes a wee bit of sense ... sort of! ;-)