Card House

I feel it building, overwhelming, I am a card house and there is a storm, Refuge itches my brain, begging for attention, I can’t ignore it, It is my oldest friend, Always there in my time of weakness, My skin welcomes it, It’s all too familiar sting, And the storm rushes out my body, There is no more storm, No more acid in my veins, I admire the carnage, Rain is still pelting down but the card house shakily stands.

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Jeremy Proehl

Date: 7/17/2016 8:07:00 AM

Hi Tyler, Welcome to Poetry Soup. I enjoyed reading your poem. Life has a way of not allowing us to feel stable. The "card house" captures that vulnerability. All the best, JP

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/12/2016 11:00:00 PM

Tyler,, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/8/2016 12:28:00 PM

- Poetry: Music in words .... rhythmic expression of emotion, like the nectar of the bee, you are sharing here with us Tyler :) - Welcome to Poetry Soup :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Skat A

Date: 6/8/2016 12:40:00 AM

Tyler, great metaphor at the end. :), Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :) Drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs **YNR - SKAT**

Tyler Ahern
Date: 6/8/2016 4:42:00 AM

Thankyou SKAT. I must say, my first impression of this community is that it is really supportive and encouraging. It is different to most parts of the internet. All the best to you.