Capsule in a Caravan

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Poetic Form: Triversen
Inspired: 2024 February 17

*Chosen subject derived from my poem: 'Ode On The Hourglass'

Image: Hourglass on the beach by EB

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A shored life awakes the old patience is a virtue a wondrous light a way for the world one way passage yielding trifles abundant returns nameless faceless novelties in scrolls constant to air The Book of Life accounts tallies clearly visible hidden from sight chance of a lifetime warps through glass bottled sealed.

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Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 2/18/2024 3:17:00 PM

was this a time capsule that surfaced in the ocean near the shore...nonetheless, your poem contains wisdom and contains the proverbial question 'is life predestined or not.' A fascinating read...will re-read later

Hilo Poet
Date: 2/18/2024 4:34:00 PM

This is my second attempt with this new poetic form that I've found to be challeging, Sara. It distorts from its original, my friend. Aloha, William