Can Not Stop

Sun down to sun up
I can not stop thinking of you
I lie awake half the night
And I wish for you I would fight

Harvesting this pain like a crop
Growing so much it might pop

Deep in thought I quickly grew
And all along deep down I knew

You were all I wanted
But you, I couldn't grasp
I wanted us to last

We swiftly moved on
The days move along

Sun down to sun up
I can not stop thinking of you
I lie awake half the night
And I wish for you I would fight

You don't see what I see in you
You are so beautiful it is true

You have everything I want
But you sit around and taunt

You laugh and talk
But are unaware
Of how without you can not bare

But you are drifting out of my sight
And because of it
I am losing what was left of my might

Sun down to sun up
I can not stop thinking of you
I lie awake half the night
And I wish for you I would fight

The day you completely leave my life
You will never know of my strife

I thrived off your beauty
I longed to see your smile
But all the while
You do not see
How amazing you are to me

But poems scare girls these days
If I showed this to you, you'd be amazed
You'd think me weird
And forever to you I'll be feared

Sun down to sun up
I can not stop thinking of you
I lie awake half the night
And I wish for you I would fight

I know not what to do
Because I am slowly losing you
And these thoughts of you keep growing
Without you even knowing
And I can not stop
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009


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Date: 10/17/2009 8:17:00 PM
Rhythmically, a few of the stanzas didn't flow very well. That could just be how they read, though. Maybe they sound smoother when read aloud. BUT, The second half of the poem was awesome! I could feel it, and that's the key to good writing in my opinion :D Fantastic!
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Date: 10/17/2009 8:08:00 PM
I really like this one...I want to rework it over time and make it perfect. Let me know what you think, I entered it in the poetrysoup contest.
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