Campaign a Quarter Horn Haiku

A staunch Hillary
Supporter so had to give
Campaign a quarter.

Jim Ho Ho Horn
to Andrea. 

So would you say this: 

Haiku has been in 
Completely correct format
The way I see things.

If not, how should I
change it?
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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April 2, 2016 at 3:43 PM
Jim I love the humor of the first one. But you are not writing haiku . Haiku involves a thought process where the last line is a twist and also the new haiku does not usually count 5/7/5. You need to study it online. There are all kinds of awesome examples for what haiku should be. Sadly, very few of us at Soup are writing them correctly. However, in Timothy Hick's last contest there were several examples of really good ones that won!
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April 2, 2016 at 5:02 PM
You are absolutely right. Read my next poem on Haiku. I am trying to get an understanding of it. Japanese is totally different compared to English. In interpretation of it may come out in several ways. Now I will research on. Watashew, Anatanie, Aieshemus. Japanese are poetic in a way. This interprest as From me, to you, love do. Reminds me of throwing mother from a train a kiss.
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