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As we rode through a fog, my father and I the car we were in, seemed to know its way home Someone's hands on the wheel,.....but no eyes on the road We were numb from the cold. There were no words to say .... We had navigated the night through a hospital haze, clinging to a hope, that was slipping away Until the end of the world came upon the new day Driving home in the car, unable to talk, our hopes and our tears had nowhere to land. If just one would escape, where would it go? No shoulder, ...no dam. How would they stop?... My Dad was in shock, as he stood by the gate, a glaze in his eyes, ...... and a million years old My feet froze in place, and knees shivered cold but without hesitation, I reached out to hold his hand in the dark, and took the control I took him inside, and with deliberate intrusion I fed him some soup, and put him to bed He was the child, and I the adult Day after day, somehow by default our roles were reversed, ...and I became strong My childhood had ended,.....and his had begun _______________________________________________________ Written originally for "The Fault Line" Contest 4/23/15 sponsored by Anthony Slausen Submitted for Brian's Contest: Late April 2018 contest

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Date: 4/24/2018 7:29:00 AM
That's a strong and touching poem, Carrie. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 4/22/2018 2:00:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this poem. So tender and sad. I don't have words.
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Date: 4/22/2018 10:34:00 AM
Wow. A FAVE for me. I love how you delivered this beauty, Carrie. Congrats on your most deserved win.
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Date: 4/22/2018 10:28:00 AM
Oh, Carrie, the pain in your exquisitely-written poem mirrors my own. I was 32 when my Mom passed away too soon at age 55, and I had to take my Dad under my wings too. Your poem is a Fave for me, and I offer you my heartfelt congratulations on your well-deserved Podium win. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 4/22/2018 10:01:00 AM
Very nice. Heart-rending. I like it. Many congrats.
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Date: 4/22/2018 9:27:00 AM
It must be hard for a child to become caretaker of their parent. You captured the emotions.
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Date: 4/22/2018 1:41:00 AM
Beautiful Carrie, and relevant to so many of us... a very touching poem. Congratulations on your win :-)
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Date: 12/9/2016 1:36:00 PM
One powerful poem, Carrie. Cheers, Doug.
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Date: 12/9/2016 12:52:00 PM
Excellent! Congrats Carrie! :-)
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Date: 12/9/2016 12:35:00 PM
Very powerful Carrie. Congratulations!
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Date: 11/21/2016 9:40:00 PM
I agree with Frank, Carrie....you were born to write. Elaine
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Date: 4/30/2015 7:51:00 PM
WONDERFUL WIN...SKAT
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Date: 4/29/2015 5:48:00 AM
Dropping back with my congrats:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 4/28/2015 2:53:00 PM
Amazing win Carrie... LINDA
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Date: 4/28/2015 2:39:00 PM
I loved your poem, Carrie...but, then, I always love your poems. The second stanza is outstanding. Congratulations!
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Date: 4/28/2015 1:50:00 PM
Glad to see another of my favorite writers on the list. Potent poem Carrie. Congrats.
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Date: 4/24/2015 2:57:00 PM
Carrie, emotional driving you master to effect of memories.. This will place high!
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Date: 4/24/2015 8:52:00 AM
One of the best poems I've read in my long life. My father died from cancer when I was only 15 and I often dream of my father living long enough for me to care for him as he did me! A7, deserves a super 10 IMHO.. Bravo!!!!!!! Adding to my fav list .... thanks..
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Date: 4/24/2015 6:23:00 AM
very powerful poem Carrie so descriptive love it gl in contest hugs
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Date: 4/23/2015 8:10:00 PM
All I can say to this is, wow! This is a winner whatever the outcome of the contest may be.
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Date: 4/23/2015 7:47:00 PM
This is superb. Should be a top winner, Carrie.
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Date: 4/23/2015 6:29:00 PM
Fear, love, realization and acceptance. Thank you, Carrie.
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Date: 4/23/2015 5:41:00 PM
oh Carrie this made me sad - such a poignant moment:-( Hugs Jan xx good luck in the contest 7 xx
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