Nette Onclaud Poet Rhyme

Burnt Wings Falling

Angelic and young , I was mesmerized
By the glitter  of fame, of endless applause--
For a world became my audience, enticed
As heaven’s stars curtsied to my glory.

This power  drugged me with blind  illusion;
Ignoring right choices  that barbed a life--
A free-fall  through sins without a vision
Where an altar of egoism ruled.

Though I  tried to grapple with such fake thrill;
How corrupt  my  pride, each dose addictive
That burnt  wings plunged  into vices , downhill
My inner child howling...lost in a maze.

For my sweetest desires have gone astray...
O , AGONY!   Yet, arms  reaching for hope
Brought me  near, nearer  to Light’s healed way,
To slowly find   and embrace my true self.


8/21/2017
Laura Loo’s Fallen Angels Contest

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James Inman September 3, 2017 at 7:15 AM A positive ending to a potentially tragic life. Strong write.

Teddy Kimathi August 29, 2017 at 4:42 AM I can almost feel the texture of the emotions in your write... Congrats Nette, for your WIN with this lovely piece! ;-)

John Michaels August 27, 2017 at 5:57 AM Lovely write, Nette - and such a great title, too!! Congratulations on your win! Regards, John.

Gregory Richard Barden August 25, 2017 at 3:51 PM Wonderful descriptions, Nette, and a gorgeous write! Congrats on your win, my friend! :-)

Beautiful Scars August 25, 2017 at 6:40 AM great poem lovely Nette, truly beautifully expressed, thank you and congrats :)

Arthur Vaso August 22, 2017 at 2:36 AM Simply a very beautiful poem! :) I really liked the last line!

Joanna Daniel August 21, 2017 at 6:11 AM Different take on the theme, Nette, glad it ends well:)

Rhoma Em August 21, 2017 at 5:16 AM Stirring me to bits; when we get intoxicated with power or fame, vices lurk. Good to know there is light in the darkness before we finally fall.

Russell Sivey August 21, 2017 at 4:41 AM WOW!! Nette, you are on a roll my friend! You might have told me that but you are certainly on a better roll than I am! And I love what you are doing with this rhyme scheme! That looks like a fun one to try! I certainly enjoyed reading this illustrious piece this morning, you have delighted me with your tremendous poem, Great Work!!

Maria Williams August 21, 2017 at 12:04 AM The name intrigued me and I just had to choose this one to read first, and what a poem. Nette, you are indeed a brilliant poet, you are born to write. Not that you need it but good luck in the contest. I'm going to fave this, and it deserves the highest rating....Maria

Paul Callus August 20, 2017 at 5:20 PM What a lovely take on this fallen angel topic, Nette! It is so easy for young people to be dragged into grasp of worldly allure. Luckily your angel managed to find the right path and grow its wings again! Hugs // paul

Franco Gonza August 20, 2017 at 2:22 PM Modern times suck us into this intoxication for power and fame. Eloquent poetry of a fallen soul saved by an awakening! The finishing touch hit me!

Vijay Pandit August 20, 2017 at 1:07 PM WOW--such poetic arrangement of melodic words! Good luck for the contest, nette!

Winged Warrior August 20, 2017 at 1:04 PM Nice entry my friend... I agree with Heidi...best of luck nette...god bless...^WW^

Heidi Sands August 20, 2017 at 12:44 PM I just love this poem Nette. It is filled with complete honesty and tells such a significant , important story for people to hear! Very inspiring! You are a success here with your beautiful poetry in a sincere way! :) Good luck in the contest!