Burdens

Take this pain from me Hold it for just a minute A moment i can be free My life it does inhibit Something you can't keep The pain is just too great Feel how it cuts deep My burden, yes it's my fate Another soul it would break Brings me down to my knees All the nights i spent awake A pain i have tried to appease Hold it for a moment Don't embrace it long There is no atonement Life feels so very wrong It's what i always carry Never does it leave Demons I've grown weary Not letting them deceive It's how I must live Every single day Heavy heart I give Burdens that weigh 2nd place STRAND SELECT 6 ,any form ,any theme Poetry Contest Sponsor;Brian Steand

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Vinoda Bommakanti

Date: 1/8/2020 10:20:00 PM

Thanks for the great creation with words...you just rock..!

Brenda Chiri
Date: 1/8/2020 11:54:00 PM

Thank you for the nice comment!;)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/8/2020 2:13:00 PM

Congrats on your TOP win Brenda--enjoyed the poem--sad yet beautifully written.

Brenda Chiri
Date: 1/8/2020 2:25:00 PM

Vijay thank you so very much!;)

John Gondolf

Date: 1/8/2020 1:23:00 PM

Congrats on your podium win, Bren! Hugs

Brenda Chiri
Date: 1/8/2020 2:25:00 PM

Thank you John much appreciated!;)

P.M. Richter

Date: 1/8/2020 1:10:00 PM

Congratulations on your win!

Brenda Chiri
Date: 1/8/2020 2:24:00 PM

Thank you so much!;)

Anisha Dutta

Date: 1/8/2020 12:46:00 PM

Congrats Brenda to win. Hugs

Brenda Chiri
Date: 1/8/2020 12:55:00 PM

Thank you so much Anisha!;)

Gershon Wolf

Date: 9/19/2019 8:14:00 PM

Wow. I can just feel how heavy these burdens are to hold. You made this write come alive, Brenda! Bravo! ~ Gershon

Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/19/2019 11:12:00 PM

Gershon thank you so much!;)

Sandra Adams

Date: 9/19/2019 6:46:00 PM

i think we would all love to have our burdens lifted, even if for only a minute... how wonderful it feels when the burdens lift...poignant write my friend, beautifully penned :) hugs

Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/19/2019 11:12:00 PM

Thank you Sandy I appreciate it!;)

Constance La France

Date: 9/19/2019 5:35:00 PM

Brenda, so emotional and so well penned. "Take this pain from me Hold it for just a minute" . . I don't think it gets much more beautiful..

Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/19/2019 5:44:00 PM

Thanks so much for seeing there is a beauty in it!;)

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 9/19/2019 3:33:00 PM

Such a beautifully sad piece Brenda, you pen this so well with great imagery and lovely rhyme too, I loved it!

Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/19/2019 5:43:00 PM

Thank you Gordon that's so sweet of you to say!;)

Chris Green

Date: 9/19/2019 3:27:00 PM

Such a sad and painful poem to read Brenda. I think many have a of of weight on them anymore, I know I do and at times it can be very overwhelming. Really well written. It is always a gift to see a new poem from you.

Brenda Chiri
Date: 9/19/2019 5:42:00 PM

Thanks Chris!;)