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Bullet Thoughts

hushed by angels singing do re mi dark cloudy skies grin to twinkling stars casting a spell of sweet romance... -------------------- skies unending tears seeps and seize humans and beasts abstract earth portrait ------------------- dozen thorns only a rose who will care to bear the bloom? bracing it's petal scented swells.. ---------------- liquid drops drumbeats it's fall drench the trees and soil newly bath earth.. --------------------- small fingers curl--- .............................tear falls from mama's cheek ---------------------------------------------------------- amidst falling rain--- ............................warm bodies dance ----------------------------------------------------------- scarlet blossom stretch--- .......................................scream of innocence _________________________________ ©O. E. Guillermo 12:36pm-- December 06, 2014

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Paul Callus

Date: 12/11/2014 12:20:00 PM

There is a lot of sense and beauty in these staccato lines; short writes can express a lot. well done Olive_eloi!:) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 12/11/2014 9:18:00 PM

hahhaah maybe I am following someone's step.. :D and trying some lines that displays less but speaks more.. :)! who could that be.. ?? :D! thanks much. :) indeed the broken monoku is my fave among these.. :)! thanks Paul.. :D

Paul Callus
Date: 12/11/2014 12:21:00 PM

...like your broken monokus best.

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 12/11/2014 6:14:00 AM

Fav. bullet No. 4. A stand alone piece. Most impressed.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 12/11/2014 9:16:00 PM

thanks much Scott.. :)! appreciate your drop.. :)!

Arthur Vaso

Date: 12/10/2014 10:38:00 PM

I was a wee bit scared you wanted to kill me with poetic bullets, but after reading this, I am alive with a smile, at this beautiful prose!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 12/10/2014 10:59:00 PM

keep that smile BUddy Art.. :)! hugs.. :) thanks for the drop by.. :)! Thank you for your thoughtfulness.. :)!

James Fraser

Date: 12/9/2014 12:52:00 PM

Sometimes thoughts fired at the paper, turn out to be gems. I love these bullets you've written, James :)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 12/10/2014 3:37:00 AM

thanks much James.. :) I soemtimes scribble in facebook but i sometimes forget to continue it.. :)! lil that I know that they are tutning fine anyhow.. :)!

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 12/9/2014 7:46:00 AM

small fingers curl--- .............................tear falls from mama's cheek. Oh!>>>love Olive...rajat

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 12/10/2014 3:35:00 AM

thanks much Rajat. :) I appreciate it.. :l this im inspired of my sisters baby.. :)

David Williams

Date: 12/8/2014 11:25:00 PM

Olive I like the rapid fire they come off the page at the reader, but if I may say I think it would read better if the 2nd and 3rd were reversed, very good piece...David

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 12/10/2014 3:34:00 AM

thanks David i take your advice.. :) i realize indeed its better.. :)

David Meade

Date: 12/8/2014 10:46:00 PM

Rain from the sky or tears from eye -- can be good and cleansing -- or too much can flood and deepen into pools of depression. Your bullets strike with deadly accuracy.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 12/10/2014 3:33:00 AM

thanks much David.. :) Just yesterday it is raining amd raining and raining.. :) and so these just came through. .